A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
According to the paragraph, it seems resonable at first sight to conclude that putting more salicylates could result in fewer headaches of the residetns of Mentia in the future. However, there are three questions that should be answered to decide whether this prediction is scientific.
First of all, it was a 20 years long study, which means there could have been many factors that have affected the residents.If overall lifestyles of the people living there haven't changed significantly and they haven't starting to take medications for thier headache, the author's claim can be supported, but if not, it can seriously harm the claim since it could be the result of medications people used.
Secondly, since food processed in the companis might have been consumed in various regions, we have to find if people living outside of Metia area also expereinced simialr health benefit. If only people living in the Mentia have shown the improvement, it could be due to other environemental reasons, such as having better life quality than before.
Third, many substances have side effects when it is overdosed. If it is true, putting extra amount of the chemical could result in side effects, rather than improving residents' headache. Therefore, it should be checked first if there is side effect of overdosing of the substance.
In conclusion, to conclude that the insistence makes sense, we have to question whether there weren't any other factors that had impact on the residents for 20 years, wheather people who are living in different regions who took the processed food also have reported that they suffer fewer headache and whether there is any side effects of overdose.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 278 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 278 350
No. of Characters: 1367 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.083 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.917 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.552 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.485 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.406 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.755 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: If
...actors that have affected the residents.If overall lifestyles of the people living...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...l lifestyles of the people living there havent changed significantly and they havent s...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...e havent changed significantly and they havent starting to take medications for thier ...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...having better life quality than before. Third, many substances have side effects...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...ense, we have to question whether there werent any other factors that had impact on th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 274.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13138686131 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64705993787 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554744525547 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.533353621 57.8364921388 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.222222222 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4444444444 23.324526521 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.2222222222 5.70786347227 232% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0764441166452 0.218282227539 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359105743908 0.0743258471296 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237521638449 0.0701772020484 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0460651724749 0.128457276422 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022190731137 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.3799401198 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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