Over time, the costs of processing go down because as organizations learn how to do things better, they become more efficient. In color film processing, for example, the cost of a 3-by-5-inch print fell from 50 cents for five-day service in 1970 to 20 cents for one-day service in 1984. The same principle applies to the processing of food. And since Olympic Foods will soon celebrate its 25th birthday, we can expect that our long experience will enable us to minimize costs and thus maximize profits
it might seem reasonable to conclude that olympic food will maximize profits since they have been for 25 years, according to the reasons that the authors gave. however, there are three assumptions that the author made that we should examine to accept the authors' claim.
First, the author assumes that just as time goes by, organization learn how to do things better and it will lead to more efficient processing of companies. however, if a company is in a field that already reached maximizing of efficiency, progressing of time doesn't change any things, which means we have to see how advance the processing of the company is to determine if it will become more efficient in the future. For example, cost of making calculator doesn't go down because it already reached its maximum efficiency of processing in the past. if olympic foods processing was already advanced enough that more improvements are almost impossible, this cannot support the author's claim.
Secondly, the writer insinuated that the changes of color film processing has not changed by comparing only costs. there could have been decreased in qualities of color film, or the industry might have found different ingredients or methods that significantly decreased the costs, not necessarily because of passing of time, which means color flim processing cannot be compared to the food company. So, if it is the case, the author’s opinion becomes weaker.
Lastly, minimizing of costs does not automatically increase profits. To maximize profits, the company has to decrease not only cost of processing, but also lowering of monthly payment of sustaining offices, monthly wages to employer. And if there was an expenditure for advertising, due to competition between companies, but the amount of they sold didn't increase, profits might have decreased. Therefore we need to check if there were not any other expenditures or changes.
In conclusion, to support the author's claim stronger, we need evidence that how advance olympic food company's process was in the past, whether film processing can be compared to the food company, and if there weren’t any increase in other costs.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1755 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.7 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.743 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.685 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
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Suggestion: However
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Suggestion: However
...more efficient processing of companies. however, if a company is in a field that alread...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...zing of efficiency, progressing of time doesnt change any things, which means we have ...
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Suggestion: There
...as not changed by comparing only costs. there could have been decreased in qualities ...
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...uthor's opinion becomes weaker. Lastly, minimizing of costs does not aut...
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Suggestion: didn't
... companies, but the amount of they sold didnt increase, profits might have decreased....
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...increase, profits might have decreased. Therefore we need to check if there were not any ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 351.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40740740741 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.49622683491 2.78398813304 126% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54415954416 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.8428886034 57.8364921388 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.571428571 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182038397963 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641725508518 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614406065948 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0910064170527 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537234879813 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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