Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Laws and legal system may seem only related to criminals. However, I am disagreeing with this claim because laws and legal system affect normal people's daily lives and also what society sees as right or wrong.
First of all, changes in laws change people's lives significantly, because laws are not all about how to punish crimes, but also about how to protect citizens in a nation. For example, before same-sex marriage became legal, many people thought it is strange to accept the marriage but now after the law was passed, many people started to think that two people who love each other should have a right to get married. Some who are agreeing with the claim might say that it doesn't mean that people's hearts or minds change but those people just learn how to hide it. But, learning that someone has to hide discriminations being afraid of punishments by laws, also mean that those people have changed to hide their feeling.
Secondly, laws imply what a society sees as a crime, which affects a lot of people's behaviors. For example, in the past, in South Korea, rape wasn't punished at all when a man, who raped a woman chose to marry the victim. At the time, rape wasn't a crime at all. people might have had hard time understanding why it had to be punished, when the beginning of the law enforcement. However now, people all agree that it is a serious crime because of the legislation of the law, which shows that laws can change people’s mind and hearts even though it takes a long time.
In conclusion, changes in legal system and laws have changed people’s lives, in that it shaped what a society agree to punish or not punish and what a society allows its citizen to do or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...m only related to criminals. However, I am disagreeing with this claim because laws and legal ...
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Suggestion:
...so what society sees as right or wrong. First of all, changes in laws change peo...
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...d have a right to get married. Some who are agreeing with the claim might say that it doesnt...
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...reeing with the claim might say that it doesnt mean that peoples hearts or minds chang...
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...mple, in the past, in South Korea, rape wasnt punished at all when a man, who raped a...
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... to marry the victim. At the time, rape wasnt a crime at all. people might have had h...
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...At the time, rape wasnt a crime at all. people might have had hard time understanding ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 2235.4752809 63% => OK
No of words: 304.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62171052632 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40494273678 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539473684211 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1146519785 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.083333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.21951772744 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305279093438 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122616557852 0.0831039109588 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752291583868 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206414282381 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297496804694 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 100.480337079 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.