Since Herald’s Hardware began advertising on the radio, its revenues have increased by 13%. This
is obvious evidence that advertising on the radio will make your business more profitable
The author in the above arguement states that, a corporate company called "Herald Hardware" which entered into the market recently, had a hiked in revenue upto 13% only after it starts advertising about their products in local radio. Here the author mentioned "since it began adverising... " means it is known to local merchents and near by people before advertising i.e..., because of reputation as a good product may be a reason for increase in it's revenue. Author also mentioned "obvious", in his view this type of advertising is the only reason for companies incresed revenue,he failed to mention strong evidence to bolster his argument.
Local merchants might know about the quality and sustainability of product, this might be cause for the increse in revenue. For suppose if the hardware product got negetive reports all over the industry, the obviously the sales drops and it affects the profits. This might be one of the reason for incresing the revenue.
He mentioned the year "2013", it is the time when industrial revolution is going on all over the world. So, during this time there is high wanting of hardware kits in many industries all over the world. By considering time constraints, the excess need of hardware kits at industries also helps the Herald Hardware companies increased revenue in year 2013.
Along with advertising about the hardware comapany, the founder may also start new production house nearby any industrial area where there is a heavy need of hardware components. Because of establish new production plant at such place may indirectly helped to gain more profits for the comapany.
Author mentioned the word "revenue", means profits also incresed for the company in year 2013. They may give heavy discounts to the customers who purchase their hardware in bulk.With this strateogy company gets more benifits rather than the consumer.
In conclusion, the authors argument is unpervasive. To buttress his statement, he should provide more factual evidence , perhaps by providing any survey details the companies increased revenue in year 2013.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author in the above arguement states that, a corporate company called 'Herald Hardware' which entered into the market recently, had a hiked in revenue upto 13 only after it starts advertising about their products in local radio.
Error: upto Suggestion: unto
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Here the author mentioned 'since it began adverising... ' means it is known to local merchents and near by people before advertising i.e..., because of reputation as a good product may be a reason for increase in it's revenue.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: merchents Suggestion: merchants
Error: ... Suggestion: an
Error: adverising Suggestion: advertising
Sentence: Author also mentioned 'obvious', in his view this type of advertising is the only reason for companies incresed revenue,he failed to mention strong evidence to bolster his argument.
Error: incresed Suggestion: increased
Sentence: Local merchants might know about the quality and sustainability of product, this might be cause for the increse in revenue.
Error: sustainability Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: increse Suggestion: increase
Sentence: For suppose if the hardware product got negetive reports all over the industry, the obviously the sales drops and it affects the profits.
Error: negetive Suggestion: negative
Sentence: This might be one of the reason for incresing the revenue.
Error: incresing Suggestion: increasing
Sentence: Along with advertising about the hardware comapany, the founder may also start new production house nearby any industrial area where there is a heavy need of hardware components.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: comapany Suggestion: company
Sentence: Because of establish new production plant at such place may indirectly helped to gain more profits for the comapany.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: comapany Suggestion: company
Sentence: Author mentioned the word 'revenue', means profits also incresed for the company in year 2013.
Error: incresed Suggestion: increased
Sentence: They may give heavy discounts to the customers who purchase their hardware in bulk.With this strateogy company gets more benifits rather than the consumer.
Error: strateogy Suggestion: strategy
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: benifits Suggestion: benefits
Sentence: In conclusion, the authors argument is unpervasive.
Error: unpervasive Suggestion: No alternate word
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maybe a wrong topic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ？？？ out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1689 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.012 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.453 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.672 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...eans it is known to local merchents and near by people before advertising i.e..., becau...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 610, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , he
...ly reason for companies incresed revenue,he failed to mention strong evidence to bo...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... evidence to bolster his argument. Local merchants might know about the qua...
^^
Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...d sustainability of product, this might be cause for the increse in revenue. For suppose...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 207, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the obviously the'. Did you mean 'obviously the'?
Suggestion: obviously the
...negetive reports all over the industry, the obviously the sales drops and it affects the profits....
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he reason for incresing the revenue. He mentioned the year '2013', ...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...panies increased revenue in year 2013. Along with advertising about the hardwar...
^^^
Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nder may also start new production house nearby any industrial area where there ...
^^
Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... also start new production house nearby any industrial area where there is a hea...
^^
Line 9, column 189, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: With
...ers who purchase their hardware in bulk.With this strateogy company gets more benifi...
^^^^
Line 11, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...an the consumer. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpervasive. To buttress hi...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... he should provide more factual evidence , perhaps by providing any survey details...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 335.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40597014925 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04574527358 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54328358209 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7237847932 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.1875 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3125 5.70786347227 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234915896652 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753803755507 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558496514615 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109486029511 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683720552836 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.