Critical judgment of work in any given field has little value unless it comes from someone who is an expert in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author in the above arguement states that, a corporate company called "herald hardware" which entered into the market recently, had a hiked in revenue upto 13% only after it starts advertising about their products in local radio. Here the author mentioned "since it began adverising... " means it is known to local merchents and near by people before advertising i.e..., because of reputation as a good product may be a reason for increase in it's revenue. author also mentioned "obvious", in his view this type of advertising is the only reason for companies incresed revenue,he failed to mention strong evidence to bolster his argument.
local merchants might know about the quality and sustainability of product, this might be cause for the increse in revenue. For suppose if the hardware product got negetive reports all over the industry, the obviously the sales drops and it affects the profits. this might be one of the reason for incresing the revenue.
he mentioned the year "2013", it is the time when industrial revolution is going on all over the world. So, during this time there is high wanting of hardware kits in many industries all over the world. By considering time constraints, the excess need of hardware kits at industries also helps the herald hardware companies increased revenue in year 2013.
Along with advertising about the hardware comapany, the founder may also start new production house nearby any industrial area where there is a heavy need of hardware components. because of establish new production plant at such place may indirectly helped to gain more profits for the comapany.
author mentioned the word "revenue", means profits also incresed for the company in year 2013. They may give heavy discounts to the customers who purchase their hardware in bulk.With this strateogy company gets more benifits rather than the consumer.
In conclusion, the authors argument is unpervasive. To buttress his statement, he should provide more factual evidence , perhaps by providing any survey details the companies increased revenue in year 2013.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...eans it is known to local merchents and near by people before advertising i.e..., becau...
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Line 1, column 481, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...e a reason for increase in its revenue. author also mentioned 'obvious', in ...
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Line 1, column 610, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , he
...ly reason for companies incresed revenue,he failed to mention strong evidence to bo...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... evidence to bolster his argument. local merchants might know about the qua...
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Line 4, column 3, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Local
...vidence to bolster his argument. local merchants might know about the quality ...
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Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...d sustainability of product, this might be cause for the increse in revenue. For suppose...
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Line 4, column 207, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the obviously the'. Did you mean 'obviously the'?
Suggestion: obviously the
...negetive reports all over the industry, the obviously the sales drops and it affects the profits....
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Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...sales drops and it affects the profits. this might be one of the reason for incresin...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he reason for incresing the revenue. he mentioned the year '2013', ...
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Line 6, column 3, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... reason for incresing the revenue. he mentioned the year '2013', it...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...panies increased revenue in year 2013. Along with advertising about the hardwar...
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Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nder may also start new production house nearby any industrial area where there ...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... also start new production house nearby any industrial area where there is a hea...
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Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...is a heavy need of hardware components. because of establish new production plant at su...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
... gain more profits for the comapany. author mentioned the word 'revenue',...
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Line 9, column 189, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: With
...ers who purchase their hardware in bulk.With this strateogy company gets more benifi...
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Line 11, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...an the consumer. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpervasive. To buttress hi...
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Line 11, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... he should provide more factual evidence , perhaps by providing any survey details...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 335.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04574527358 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54328358209 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7237847932 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0625 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3125 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0578315658112 0.243740707755 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0221642997701 0.0831039109588 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0178785160957 0.0758088955206 24% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.033304253314 0.150359130593 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153396504909 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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