The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria.
"Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry. In order to stop the erosion, we should charge people for using the beaches. Although this solution may annoy a few tourists in the short term, it will raise money for replenishing the sand. Replenishing the sand, as was done to protect buildings on the nearby island of Batia, will help protect buildings along our shores, thereby reducing these buildings' risk of additional damage from severe storms. And since beaches and buildings in the area will be preserved, Tria's tourist industry will improve over the long term."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the letter from tourism bureau Head from Tria island, it is stated that opponents think, replenishing the sand at the nearby island of Batia could decrease the soil erosion at Tria island. The opponents have come to this conclusion by assuming that protecting the buildings and beaches form severe storms at nearby island Batia may decrease the erosion. Consequently, these can ameliorate the tourism of Tria island. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, 2 questions must be answered by opponents.
First of all, does charging money from tourists helps the condition of Tria beach? What if few people think it as a financial burden which decreases the visitor's rate? In other words, visiting other countries is associated with the heavy cost including food and shelter. Even middle-class people from many countries can not visit their nearby countries because of their financial problems. In addition to another cost, if the beaches also introduce an entry ticket to visit their beach, they think it as a double burden and may cancel or change their plan to visit Tria island. if either of these scenarios has merits, then the conclusion drawn by opponents in the original argument is mostly weakened.
Secondly, does only saving the beaches and buildings form Batia island decreases soil erosion at beaches in island Tria? Isn't a burden for the Tria island government for saving or reconstructing the buildings at other islands? In other words, rather than taking of other nations buildings and beaches why can't Tria government tale care about their own islands beaches? Instead of saving Batia's buildings and beaches form severe storms, they can take steps to save their sources at beaches which could increase their tourist's rate. if they concentrate more on Batia island resources and buildings, tourism at Batia island may increase. And there won't be any positive effect on Tria island by saving their neighbours buildings. if the above is true, then the argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, the argument is considerably flawed as it more reliance on various unwarranted assumptions. if the author can answer the above questions in details and offer more evidence, then it is possible to charge money form tourists in Tria island to replenish sand to save soil from erosion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1909 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.037 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.543 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.289 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... may decrease the erosion. Consequently, these can ameliorate the tourisum of tri...
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Line 5, column 497, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doubles'?
Suggestion: doubles
... to visit thier beach, they think it as double burdent and may cancel or change their...
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Line 5, column 526, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hink it as double burdent and may cancel or change their plan to visit tria islan...
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Line 5, column 571, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...change their plan to visit tria island. if either of these scenarios has merits, t...
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Line 8, column 124, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Isn't
...il erosion at beaches in island tria ? Isnt a burdent for the tria island governmen...
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Line 8, column 309, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...other nations buildings and beaches why cant tria govenment tale care about thier ow...
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Line 8, column 534, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: If
...ich could increase thier tourists rate. if they concentrate more on batia island r...
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Line 8, column 671, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...crease. And there wonnt be any positive affect on tria island by saving their neighbours ...
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Line 8, column 729, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...and by saving their neighbours buildings . if the above is true, then the argument...
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Line 8, column 732, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... by saving their neighbours buildings . if the above is true, then the argument do...
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Line 11, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...nce on various unwarranted assumptions. if the author can answer the above questio...
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Line 11, column 187, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tions in details and offer more evidence , then it is possible to charge money for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 373.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20107238606 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57255511282 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520107238606 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9891667602 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.105263158 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6315789474 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305048636113 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102272284999 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936246501732 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195582652436 0.128457276422 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667600848824 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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