Hospital statistics regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller-skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment. Within that group of people, 75 percent of those who had accidents in streets or parking lots had not been wearing any protective clothing (helmets, knee pads, etc.) or any light-reflecting material (clip-on lights, glow-in-the-dark wrist pads,etc.). Clearly, the statistics indicate that by investing in high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their risk of being severely injured in an accident.
Write a response in which you examine the unstated assumptions of the argument above and explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The passage presented above indicates that people who indulge in roller-skating are more likely to be prone to accidents due to the lack of using quality safety equipment and by doing roller-skating in areas such as parking lots etc. These assumption made are fallacious and need some concrete evidence by the author of this passage to warrant his justifications and claims made in the passage.
The facts and figures presented in the article are derived from the statistics of a hospital. It states that out of the sample size of people evaluated 75 percent of them, who are involved in accidents, do not use proper safety equipment. But the people who are included in this statistics may be beginners who might have just started learning roller-skating on their own without proper guidance or coaching. These individuals are naturally more prone to injury and accidents than professional and trained experts in the sport. But now where it is mentioned about the sample size or the level of individuals who are being evaluated for their record in the statistics. This leads to a serious doubt in the accuracy and veracity of the hospital statistics.
Another major assumption made is about the fact that majority of the accidents are being caused due to lack of proper safety equipment and adherence to wearing protective clothing. Generally any sort of equipment associated with sporing or safety measures is expensive. The author assumes that everyone can afford the clothing and safety equipment. This may not be always true as it is now where mentioned or referenced about the financial background of these skaters. Also it is not stated in the passage about the quality of safety equipment and clothing. A rider may be wearing all the required equipment, but if it's quality is poor then it makes absolutely no sense in wearing it. Hence to make such a claim is illogical.
Lastly the author states with the help of the statistics that 75 percent of the surveyed people have had accidents in streets or parking lots. These are areas of high population and very high frequency of motor transport. So the probability for someone to be injured in these areas while doing roller-skating with the use of good quality safety equipment also increases drastically. An accident involving cars, bikes or even trucks are most likely lethal and cause a lot of damage to the individual.
Thus with the help of the above assumptions made we can clearly state that the passage written by the author is unfounded. If any of the claims are proven to be incorrect then it seriously hurts and undermines the stability, structure and validity of the argument made above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2181 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.879 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.359 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'These assumptions'?
Suggestion: This assumption; These assumptions
...ting in areas such as parking lots etc. These assumption made are fallacious and need some concr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...duals are naturally more prone to injury and accidents than professional and trai...
^^
Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...afety equipment and adherence to wearing protective clothing. Generally any sort ...
^^
Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly any sort of equipment associated with sporing or safety measures is expensive....
^^
Line 5, column 472, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... financial background of these skaters. Also it is not stated in the passage about t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 688, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...akes absolutely no sense in wearing it. Hence to make such a claim is illogical. L...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e a lot of damage to the individual. Thus with the help of the above assumptions ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, lastly, may, so, then, thus, while, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96868008949 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78216860405 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469798657718 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4113320757 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.761904762 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52380952381 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25818771282 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667109470854 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819251068276 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140816580722 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0900148916709 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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