An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor s record of treating similarly afflicted patients Through gaining such access the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition Write a re

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An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

The statement made by a certain ailing patient that an individual undergoing treatment under a certain doctor should have access to the doctor's history and past records of treating similar patients. Though this seems a valid an plausible claim to make on behalf of the patient's side, on the doctor's side of view it is completely illogical. I completely disagree with this notion expressed by the patient.

When a patient visits a doctor for consultation and treatment of a certain ailment, the patient goes a with a view and understanding that the doctor will cure the ailment. Some doctors are speciailzed in treatment of certain diseases like cancer etc, or any ailment pertaining to any other part of the body. Medicine as a field involves a tremendous research and is long lasting and requires several years of meticuluous practice and study. By expressing a claim that the patient under treatment needs access to the data and records of the doctor for similar cases throws the doctor's experience and his credentials into a mix. The patient says that he is not satisfactory or feels that the doctor's method of treatment is not doing any good on him and hence he wants the past records of the doctor's cases with patients with similar ailments. By doing this it can give rise to widespread protocols and temporary ban by the doctor's community. They may go on a strike and claim that there is no sense if the patients cannot trust them to do their job effectively.

The patient's claim of him needing access to the doctor's records is a direct attack on the doctor's validity as a doctor. It takes years of specialized study and a plethora of experience to be a doctor in today's day and age. Therefore if a patient, for example is being cured for a clot in the brain, and he preemptively looks online in the internet or asks hi friends about the process of the treatment, he is going to end up with half and dangerous knowledge. The minute and subtle differences that occur in the case of a brain clot is known only to a doctor who has specialized in the field and has credible experience with him.Thus a patient with such half-knowledge may not only tarnish his relationship with the doctor but also may have himself not treated by anyone.

On the other hand if the patient is himself a doctor or someone who has the fundamental and releavent knowledge to the matter or ailment at hand, in such cases the patient can suggest some recommendations. But with the delicacy and skill that is involved in this profession, I think it is best if we leave it up to the doctor's to decide the course and plan of treatment for a particular patient.

Thus with the help of the above claims and example's made I reiterate my point of view. The claim made by the author in the question is incomplete, illogical and fallacious. It has nothing to support it's side the way it is presented and interpreted. By making such claims we are disrespecting the doctor's who treat and cure us. Insted of that we should be more beneficial and express our gratitude towards them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ertain doctor should have access to the doctors history and past records of treating si...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...lar patients. Though this seems a valid an plausible claim to make on behalf of th...
^^
Line 3, column 691, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...e is not satisfactory or feels that the doctors method of treatment is not doing any go...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 783, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... him and hence he wants the past records of the doctors cases with patients with ...
^^
Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ctors records is a direct attack on the doctors validity as a doctor. It takes years of...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e to be a doctor in todays day and age. Therefore if a patient, for example is being cure...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 630, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ld and has credible experience with him.Thus a patient with such half-knowledge may ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 630, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ld and has credible experience with him.Thus a patient with such half-knowledge may ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... treatment for a particular patient. Thus with the help of the above claims and e...
^^^^
Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ove claims and examples made I reiterate my point of view. The claim made by the ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2520.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 540.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74160646988 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455555555556 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 778.5 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1690673175 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351783681698 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110732858093 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999383262655 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213316684045 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090987882717 0.0667264976115 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ertain doctor should have access to the doctors history and past records of treating si...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...lar patients. Though this seems a valid an plausible claim to make on behalf of th...
^^
Line 3, column 691, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...e is not satisfactory or feels that the doctors method of treatment is not doing any go...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 783, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... him and hence he wants the past records of the doctors cases with patients with ...
^^
Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ctors records is a direct attack on the doctors validity as a doctor. It takes years of...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e to be a doctor in todays day and age. Therefore if a patient, for example is being cure...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 630, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ld and has credible experience with him.Thus a patient with such half-knowledge may ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 630, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ld and has credible experience with him.Thus a patient with such half-knowledge may ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... treatment for a particular patient. Thus with the help of the above claims and e...
^^^^
Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ove claims and examples made I reiterate my point of view. The claim made by the ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2520.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 540.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74160646988 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455555555556 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 778.5 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1690673175 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351783681698 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110732858093 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999383262655 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213316684045 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090987882717 0.0667264976115 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.