An argument presented here by the author, though sounds convincing at a first glance, doesn't make a cogent case and is bound with many holes and assumptions, and needs to be evaluated carefully considering various circumstances and factors.
First of all, the assumption that the people who met with an accident and were sent to the emergency room, we need to evaluate first the cause of the accident. Author assumes that those met with an accident were not wearing protective equipments when the accident happened. It may be the case that the people met with the accident were all wearing protective knee caps or other equipments, but were hit by some vehicle. This undermines the explicitely stated claim for the requirement of investing more into the protective equipments. Another possibility is that, the person who met with the accident was not skating in the predefined area for skating, but on some other location not suitable or safe for skating, like any hilly area or cliff or any under construction road on which holes are dug and the skater might have fallen into the pit by himself.
Moreover, the author further states another report regarding the accidents that 75 percent of those who met with the accident were in accidental zone of streets and parking lots and were found not wearing the protective shields or light reflecting equipments when met with the accident.The possiblity that seriously undermines this statement is that the person met with the accident was in the parking lot after parking his vehicle, just removed his protective clothing and was hit by a another car. Another is although the person had been wearing protective equipment and was practicing skating or was just a beginner, who fallen by himself while practicing, or might had hit a car or wall by himself.
Furthermore, the reliabilty of the hospital reports should also be taken into consideration for a more thorough interpretation of incidents.
In conclusion, it is every citizen's responsibility to not only keep himself safe but also the other people around him, to lessen accidents and damage to any kind of property. This statement, although has some major assumptions and holes, suggests a safer perspective for the particular sports.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It may be the case that the people met with the accident were all wearing protective knee caps or other equipments, but were hit by some vehicle.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This undermines the explicitely stated claim for the requirement of investing more into the protective equipments.
Error: explicitely Suggestion: explicitly
Sentence: Moreover, the author further states another report regarding the accidents that 75 percent of those who met with the accident were in accidental zone of streets and parking lots and were found not wearing the protective shields or light reflecting equipments when met with the accident.The possiblity that seriously undermines this statement is that the person met with the accident was in the parking lot after parking his vehicle, just removed his protective clothing and was hit by a another car.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: Furthermore, the reliabilty of the hospital reports should also be taken into consideration for a more thorough interpretation of incidents.
Error: reliabilty Suggestion: reliability
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1836 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.949 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.743 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.269 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.694 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...gh sounds convincing at a first glance, doesnt make a cogent case and is bound with ma...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...g equipments when met with the accident.The possiblity that seriously undermines th...
^^^
Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... his protective clothing and was hit by a another car. Another is although the pe...
^
Line 5, column 573, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ad been wearing protective equipment and was practicing skating or was just a beg...
^^
Line 9, column 28, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...ncidents. In conclusion, it is every citizens responsibility to not only keep himself...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, while, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 369.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09756097561 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83365181814 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50406504065 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.105861217 57.8364921388 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.0 119.503703932 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5454545455 23.324526521 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 5.70786347227 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278657901908 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100441064331 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620679730084 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119685770261 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906178878254 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.3799401198 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.