Looking at the statement, in a much thorough way, a cogent case has been made highlighting the importance of the co-operation and co-ordination required in every other field.
However, emphasizing less on the competition, a natural way by which there's a building up of a sense of co-operation passively, narrows the scope of this case to some extent. Broadly, in industries, government sectors or any other field, workers have to co-ordinate with different departments, for example, in purchase and logistics departments of a huge multinational industry, a close coordination should be there with the supply and sales of the product, which defines the efficiency and dependability of these departments over one another. But this doesn't necessarily mean that the two department heads or leaders are not competing with each other, maybe in terms of efficiency, or achieving some sort of appreciation from the top management etc. This proves a competition rather would enhance a more sense of co-operation in the long run.
Again, if there's no any competition, there would not be any means, or a filteration criteria by which we can judge people and their sense of co-operation, required in the industry or other governmental sections. So, both should go hand in hand, for a more logical conclusive end.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...the competition, a natural way by which theres a building up of a sense of co-operatio...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... departments over one another. But this doesnt necessarily mean that the two departmen...
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Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...operation in the long run. Again, if theres no any competition, there would not be ...
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Line 5, column 18, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...on in the long run. Again, if theres no any competition, there would not be any...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, for example, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 33.0505617978 21% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1097.0 2235.4752809 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 210.0 442.535393258 47% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22380952381 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.55969084622 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23209878949 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 215.323595506 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.4932671777 130% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 704.065955056 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.5694006082 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.714285714 118.986275619 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 23.4991977007 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.21951772744 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158486611052 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682691219379 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406300521877 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10198527385 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340795887357 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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