A first glance on the argument presented by the author here seems to be convincing, however, further digging of the topic is necessary to help us to take a stand on whether the WWAC should alter their pattern of radio style from music to more of a news or talks or not.
Firstly, evidence that is needed to evaluate the argument is the reason of the decline in the listener numbers of the WWAC radio station. If it is the case that there is another radio station or stations in the same area which play songs of other genres or a variety of genres instead of only rock music, the listeners might be prefering those stations than WWAC. This evidence, if true, would weaken the assumption that there's less interest for music in the area and that WWAC shouldswitch to news or talk programs.
Secondly, the suggestion that the switch to the music format tailored to the tastes of the retired people which has moved to the city, sounds logical, because, it is quite natural that most of the senior citizen would not prefer rock music genre much. The author further states the reports which present a decline in the sales of local music recordings and concludes that this is by far the reason people are not interested in music. However, there is not a logical bridge between the two. Decline in the sales of local music does not prove that the people of the city or area are not interested in music anymore. We need to evaluate furhter what is the cause of decline in sales of music. It might be the case that people are not buying local music, but prefer some other regional music or if not, they prefer listening to the music online instead of purchasing. If this is true, would again weaken the argument that the WWAC channel should shift their genre to news.
Furthermore, If it is the case that the people do not purchase any of the music at all, this would suggest that there is really a decline in the taste of music and the author's judgement would be strengthend in that case. Moreover, we need to evaluate more considering all the factors above like music taste of different age group people, reason for the decline in the sale of music etc.
In conclusion, these evidences need to be examined in order to make author's argument strong.
Essay evaluation report
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 405 350
No. of Characters: 1802 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.486 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.449 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.226 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.003 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g, however, further digging of the topic is necessary to help us to take a stand ...
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Line 4, column 422, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
... true, would weaken the assumption that theres less interest for music in the area and...
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Line 8, column 169, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...a decline in the taste of music and the authors judgement would be strengthend in that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58024691358 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28957465721 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449382716049 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.8165419026 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.5 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9285714286 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187027999716 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734820408702 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418361039733 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806742182852 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647288381811 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.3550499002 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.197005988 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 12.5979740519 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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