An international development organization, in
response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished
nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A.
While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid
subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a
staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To
combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do
everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
According to an international development organization, the government of Tagus
should do everything it can to promote the type of millet breed which is supposed
to be high in vitamin A to fight against of the deficiency of it among people. To
make this conclusion, the organization assumes that people of the country will
readily adopt to the new variety of millet and subsidies paid to farmers can inspire
them to cultivate new variety of millet which is expensive. I found this argument
irrational because it rests upon several spurious assumptions.
In the first analysis, the organization asserts to have created the new variety of
millet which is rich in vitamin A without giving validation which seems spurious.
How the organization is so sure about its efficiency without citing any study to
prove so? Also, genetically enhanced species are notorious for making lethal side
effect to its consumer. The organization does not seems to make light on these
prospects. This renders question on his credibility.
Furthermore, the organization assumes that the people of Tagus will readily adopt
to the new variety of millet giving reasoning of being staple food in Thagus.
However since the breed is changed from the original one, that may lead to change
its taste too, people might distaste the new millet. Moreover, the organization
predicts that hypothesis without any survey. This makes the stance of the
organization spurious.
Additionally, the organization itself asserts the expensiveness of the seed of millet
breed but readily maintains that giving subsidies to the farmer afterwards can
balance this problem. As a matter of fact, farmers need money mostly on the time
of their cultivation. f purchase of seed alone can cost that much to them, then what
will make sure that subsidies that will be given to them after farming? Also, the
statement about the subsidies is not made by the government of the country which
is responsible for its farmers, but just a suggestion by the organization. so, there is
no way a farmer can hope for subsidies at all. Thus, here premise is not satisfied by
the organizations.
To sum up, the specious assumption that the organization believes renders lack of
credibility to the argument. To strengthen the argument, the organization should
have taken survey about how people is possibly going to react the new breed, the
government will of paying subsidies to farmer, any other cheap way to eradicate
deficiency problem, study about side effect of the genetically enhanced breed et
cetera.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 2077 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.005 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.835 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.335 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...hat people of the country will readily adopt to the new variety of millet and subsidies...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 51, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seem'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: seem
...its consumer. The organization does not seems to make light on these prospects. This...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 51, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...its consumer. The organization does not seems to make light on these prospects. This...
^^^^^
Line 16, column 77, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...s that the people of Tagus will readily adopt to the new variety of millet giving reason...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 18, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...soning of being staple food in Thagus. However since the breed is changed from the ori...
^^^^^^^
Line 26, column 23, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: F
...stly on the time of their cultivation. f purchase of seed alone can cost that mu...
^
Line 29, column 76, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... just a suggestion by the organization. so, there is no way a farmer can hope for...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, may, moreover, so, then, thus, as a matter of fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27951807229 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91805736568 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498795180723 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.2513167136 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.55 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 32.0 5.15768463074 620% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329707575083 0.218282227539 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829689356205 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905354615997 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0754902672055 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642311532428 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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