An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The Author say that To combat Vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. His argument not honest because millet cost is high, so everyone cannot but this product. I strongly disagree with the claim and find it illogical due to the below mentioned reasons:
First Argument of writer is, An international development company, in answer to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus,has engineered a new breed of millet high in Vitamin A. Nation have different type of land, so this new of millet can't produce in every land. For example, for apple tree only red sand soil entail, and apple can't grow in another type land. So, first they have to do perfect test in which type of soil new breed of millet consummate grow.
Second argument of author is, while seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. If farmers take subsidies they have to paid back, and the market of new breed millet is low then how can farmers paid their subsidies. So they have Reduce the price of New type of millet or they should give subsidies at 0 percent interest rate.
Next argument is, Since millet is already a staple food in tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. If people has already adopt millet. So it is trivial to adopt new type of millet.
In the whole, The author argument has flaws as per mine mention the above the reasons. To combat Vitamin A deficiency , the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. They should change some decisions like reduce price of the new millet, and check which type of land is perfect for new breed of millet.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 314 350
No. of Characters: 1401 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.21 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.462 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.281 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.774 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.436 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , has
...ople in the impoverished nation of Tagus,has engineered a new breed of millet high i...
^^^^
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ent type of land, so this new of millet cant produce in every land. For example, for...
^^^^
Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ee only red sand soil entail, and apple cant grow in another type land. So, first th...
^^^^
Line 5, column 300, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: Reduced
...mers paid their subsidies. So they have Reduce the price of New type of millet or they...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ple will readily adopt the new variety. If people has already adopt millet. So it ...
^^
Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'adopted'.
Suggestion: adopted
... the new variety. If people has already adopt millet. So it is trivial to adopt new t...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 68, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gument has flaws as per mine mention the above the reasons. To combat Vitamin A d...
^^
Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... reasons. To combat Vitamin A deficiency , the government of Tagus should do every...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, then, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 313.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61661341853 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35245143406 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472843450479 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0805852675 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46666666667 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.538642346821 0.218282227539 247% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.195592141595 0.0743258471296 263% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110848477938 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303925793617 0.128457276422 237% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667795931572 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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