On the face of it the development of new millet to counter the deficiency of Vitamin A among the natives of Tagus seems a brilliant step. However, there are series of assumptions and serious questions which needs to be answered before government decides to implement the policy advocated by international development organization.
First of all, it is mentioned that new breed of millet has been developed. The questions arise here are how this new millet breed has been developed? Is this specifically bred for Tagus's climatic and agricultural conditions or it is some generic breed which has not been tested in the agricultural conditions of Tagus. The assumption that, new breed will succeed in Tagus is a huge assumption. In case it fails to adapt it will be a monumental failure of huge proportions which could cost dearly to people in terms of food security and financial conditions.
Secondly, author assumes that new breed will have similar taste to the old breed. It is also a big assumptions, author has assumed people will have no issues in adapting to it. However, as we know humans they have specific tastes and liking towards certain grain types. It could well be the case that people of Tagus refuse to accept the taste of new breed of millet. Hence it would be prudent for the organization to first test the taste and culinary acceptance of new millet.
Thirdly, it is claimed that new breed will have higher content of Vitamin A while author fails to provide any information about the content of Vitamin A in existing breed. Testing out the contents of Vitamin A in both the breeds will make the situation much clearer and would be able to data evidence about which millet has more Vitamin A.
Fourthly, It is mentioned that organization wants seed subsidies for promotion of new millet breed. My question here would be, are there serious benefits arising from new millet for government to make the investment. Even if marginal gains are substantial in overcoming Vitamin A deficiency, these need to be demonstrated with data evidence that benefits overrule investment by some margin. Then only organization should raise discussion over seed subsidies. Also, we should explore, engaging government in seed production to reduce the cost rather than seeking subsidies.
To conclude, we must overcome all the assumptions and questions raised in prior discussion. Major being acceptability and adaptability of new breed in agro climatic conditions of Tagus. Along with, factual evidence of vitamin A content in both the breeds. Organization must also carry out mass checks about the taste acceptability of new millet and finally it must revisit the claim that government should provide seed subsidies by proposing studies information and analysis.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 --not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
argument 4 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2267 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.993 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.772 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.739 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.973 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.522 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'assumption'?
Suggestion: assumption
...aste to the old breed. It is also a big assumptions, author has assumed people will have no...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ccept the taste of new breed of millet. Hence it would be prudent for the organizatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2322.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11453744493 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.836104736 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480176211454 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.975934302 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.956521739 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7391304348 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425831341625 0.218282227539 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129060506961 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826362461561 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227978175697 0.128457276422 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437895049379 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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