An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The recommendation for adopting a new breed of millet to overcome the vitamin A deficiency in Tagus should be scrutinized further. Specific questions regarding the results, adoption and effectiveness of this method should be studies in order to arrive at the conclusion of whether this recommendation will have the predicted result.
Firstly, the new breed of millet has been engineered by an international development organisation. Before pronouncing it as a panacea to the vitamin deficiency problem of Tagus it should be established whether it is suited to be cultivated in the climate that Tagus offers. Do the geo-physical features of the country provide a favorable atmosphere for the millet to be grown? As it is a new variety the answer to this question should be positive to consider this as a feasible solution to the problem at hand.
Secondly, questions pertaining to the acceptability and adoption of this millet must be answered. Even though farmers will be paid subsidies in order to support in purchasing the costly seed of the millet there are other factors which strongly influence the adoption rate of farmers. For example, does this new type of millet have costlier methods of cultivation as well like increased use of fertilizers or pesticides? Is the subsidy being provided to the farmers enough for them to consider cultivating the new millet? Is the new variety of millet equally easy to harvest, clean and store? Even though farmers in Tagus already consume millet, the new variety might vary in its taste. Hence it should be established first whether it can be real substitute to existing millets in a true sense. Only when these questions are answered can the rate of adoption be estimated correctly.
Thirdly, the argument does not provide any information of how landless people will get access to this new variety of millet. Since the vitamin deficiency is widespread across the population, but the seed is only being provided to the farmers the question of making this new variety of millet available to all has to be answered. How will landless people get access to this millet? How can this intervention be scaled up? These are important questions to be asked.
Fourthly, in addition to this method of adopting a relatively new variety of millet questions regarding other possible methods should also be evaluated. The suggestion to do everything possible to promote this new millet sounds like the government of Tagus is keeping all its eggs in one basket. The possibility of all feasible solutions to the problem at hand should be considered along with the cost and benefits to help evaluate this recommendation.
The suggestion to adopt a new millet which is rich in Vitamin A can be effective. But its effectiveness is subject to a lot of supporting circumstances. For this, the questions posed above need to be answered and explored to determine effectively if this millet will bring about the desired results for the nation and people of Tagus.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
argument 4 -- OK
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Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. //your argument 2
condition 2:
Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. //maybe people don't like the taste
conclusion:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. //your argument 4
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 494 350
No. of Characters: 2449 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.714 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.957 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.879 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.76 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.783 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...option of this millet must be answered. Even though farmers will be paid subsidies in order...
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Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as well 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...costlier methods of cultivation as well like increased use of fertilizers or pestici...
^^^^
Line 5, column 687, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...he new variety might vary in its taste. Hence it should be established first whether ...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... help evaluate this recommendation. The suggestion to adopt a new millet which ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, as to, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2504.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 494.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06882591093 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94263756996 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439271255061 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 797.4 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.984525112 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.16 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.76 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443079231084 0.218282227539 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148988921072 0.0743258471296 200% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843872006853 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270686688455 0.128457276422 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528852552945 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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