An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author states that the government should promote the new type of millet in order to fight the vitamin A deficiency. However, this argument is not entirely feasible as there are many loopholes present within it.
According to the author, government should promote the new type of millet. This new breed is developed by an international organization and so, without testing the new breed on various animals, it would be a great risk to the people. Without testing of the breed, the side-effects of the breed could not be known. Hence, the breed should be tested under a licensed government research center only after which, the drug should be released publicly.
It is stated that millet is already a staple food in Tagus. The author assumes that as millet is already a regular food in Tagus, people would readily agree to consume the new breed of millet. There might be many taste differences as well as cost differences between the two breeds and hence some people might consider to stay on the current food and not to move on with the new breed. Also, people would not be convinced to consume the new breed unless it becomes popular in Tagus.
As mentioned in the argument, the cost of the breed is higher than the conventional millet.Due to the high cost, people would not be ready to purchase a new breed of millet that costs standard than the conventional one. Due to this, the consumption of the new breed of millet might not meet the predictions.
Also, the author assumes that providing subsidies to the farmers to grow the new breed of millet would encourage them to cultivate more stock. But, if the consumption of the new breed does not go as planned by the government, the farmers would be diverted to producing the original millet, which would earn them more profit as it would be consumed on a larger basis than the new breed.
It is lucid from the above information that if the plan of promoting this new type of millet does not go as planned, the government would suffer a major loss of money that it has invested in the campaign, which is not a favorable result. Instead, the government should lay emphasis on promoting free medications for the vitamin A deficiency patients. Doing so will bolster the combat against the vitamin A deficiency in Tagus.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 1832 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.591 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.492 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.057 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.655 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider staying'.
Suggestion: consider staying
... two breeds and hence some people might consider to stay on the current food and not to move on ...
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Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Due
... is higher than the conventional millet.Due to the high cost, people would not be r...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74623115578 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56582368363 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44472361809 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9591609907 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.117647059 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4117647059 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434495949034 0.218282227539 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15625392255 0.0743258471296 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623251916949 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232616446619 0.128457276422 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391083461507 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.3550499002 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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