In this argument , the author stated that the poverty driven people of Tagus is facing Vitamin A deficiency . The international organization has engineered new Millet breed enriched with Vitamin A which would decrease the deficiency of vitamin A as these are their main staple food. However , before this recommendation can be properly evaluated , two question must be answered.
First of all,is Millet the only way to decrease Vitamin A deficiency ? In other words , is it possible that the deficiency of the Vitamin A can be alleviated using different food item enriched with Vitamin A? May be millet production can not be done in large quantity then the nation who are dependent on this new millet breed will also be deprived from getting these food. If either of these scenarios has merit, then conclusion drawn from the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, do the more subsidies will influence the farmers to engage in millet production ? It doesn't mention that the cost of millet production is high or not . As the farmers are poverty driven they may not produce the millet in these areas. If the above is true, then the argument does not hold the water.
In Conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the two questions above and offer more evidence then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to use new breed of millet which will eradicate Vitamin deficiency.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 256 350
No. of Characters: 1250 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.883 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.772 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.398 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.059 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
In this argument , the author stated that the poverty driv...
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Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... of Tagus is facing Vitamin A deficiency . The international organization has engi...
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Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hese are their main staple food. However , before this recommendation can be prope...
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Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...recommendation can be properly evaluated , two question must be answered. First...
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Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , is
...estion must be answered. First of all,is Millet the only way to decrease Vitamin...
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Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...se Vitamin A deficiency ? In other words , is it possible that the deficiency of t...
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Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'these foods'?
Suggestion: this food; these foods
...reed will also be deprived from getting these food. If either of these scenarios has merit...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ers to engage in millet production ? It doesnt mention that the cost of millet product...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...cost of millet production is high or not . As the farmers are poverty driven they ...
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Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t of millet production is high or not . As the farmers are poverty driven they may...
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Line 7, column 203, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...questions above and offer more evidence then it will be possible to fully evaluate t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 254.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06299212598 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84393920652 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527559055118 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.5715593021 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9230769231 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394663815092 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133482231136 0.0743258471296 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908713960206 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239488469256 0.128457276422 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607140478301 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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