The advertising director stated that during the past year though fewer people attended the super Screen-produced movies but the number of positive reviews increased about specific movies by reviewers. So he suggested to allocate more share to its budget as some of the people given positive reviews about some super screen movies. However, before this recommendation can be fully evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First of all, are these positive reviews from any movie critics or from normal movie reviewers?In other words, it may be the case that some audience gave positive reviews without having proper knowledge about any super screen movie. Further, It may be the first time they wateched the show , so they gave positive feedbacks.If either of the scenarios has merit, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, are the cost of the ticket increased due to low audience in the show?That may be the case that the ticket price has been increased as their is less audience to watch the show. If the condition is like this then increasing budget doesnot increase audience rather the price of ticket must be reduced. If the above is true, then the argument does not hold water.
Thirdly, which peoples are coming to watch these shows ? Are they quite interested in these movies or just they want to pass the time . If the peoples are very in that region then increasing budget would not bring them to the show. So the argument cannot be evaluated properly.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to several unwarranted assumptions. If the director can give the answers of the above three questions and offer more evidence then it will be possible to evaluate the viability of the recommendation to increase the budget for the show.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1487 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.859 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.544 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.446 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.929 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.607 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested allocating'.
Suggestion: suggested allocating
...out specific movies by reviewers. So he suggested to allocate more share to its budget as some of the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...to allocate more share to its budget as some of the people given positive reviews about som...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... critics or from normal movie reviewers?In other words, it may be the case that so...
^^
Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...knowledge about any super screen movie. Further, It may be the first time they w...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...be the first time they wateched the show , so they gave positive feedbacks.If eith...
^^
Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
... show , so they gave positive feedbacks.If either of the scenarios has merit, then...
^^
Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...creased due to low audience in the show?That may be the case that the ticket price h...
^^^^
Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
... the ticket price has been increased as their is less audience to watch the show. If ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eir is less audience to watch the show. If the condition is like this then increas...
^^
Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ovies or just they want to pass the time . If the peoples are very in that region ...
^^
Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...es or just they want to pass the time . If the peoples are very in that region the...
^^
Line 9, column 201, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...three questions and offer more evidence then it will be possible to evaluate the via...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 303.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05940594059 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67550478556 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524752475248 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0984902449 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254466780732 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851428208861 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156632098278 0.0701772020484 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142774508673 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159740072441 0.0628817314937 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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