An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
There is sufficient scientific evidence that deficiency of Vitamin A can result in severe health problems, thus it is important for any country to address the issue of Vitamin A deficiency among its citizens.
The proposal to introduce a new variety of Millet in Tagus will most certainly face many regulatory issues as it can have long reaching results and effects on local flora and fauna. Also, it requires assessment on how will its introduction affect local biosphere.
Also, this proposal must be economically feasible in the long term, for the program to be continue and have desired effects. It needs to be assessed how the introduction of an new variety of millet will have effects on farmer’s income and well-being and also, that of other people directly or indirectly dependent on millet production.
Also, there is a need to evaluate the long term health effects on the local population of the country, as it might introduce another health problem, as a side effect.
A major indicator of the success and viability of the proposed program can be the government expenditure to treat diseases caused by vitamin A deficiency and the subsidy provided by the government to the farmers. The program is feasible only if there is a noticable improvement in the health of citizens of the country, thus resulting in long term economic benefits.
Further, it needs to be assured that the retail price for the new variety of Millet is required to be similar, equal, or preferably lower than that of other, regular variety of millet. Also, the new variety of millet must taste same, or better that the regular variety. Higher retail costs or a different taste might impact its adoption among the local population, which might result in failure of the original objective.
Long term environmental impact must also be considered, as it might result in a poor soil quality, which is unfit for growing other crops or any crops in the long run.
For any country, healthcare is very important for the betterment of the citizens of that country. Thus it is important for the government of Tagus, to introduce and promote the new variety of millet, rich in Vitamin A, after considering factors mentioned above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1788 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.819 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.666 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.538 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.729 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... to be assessed how the introduction of an new variety of millet will have effects...
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Line 14, column 99, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...erment of the citizens of that country. Thus it is important for the government of T...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99730458221 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74069518875 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4474393531 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0970073302 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.428571429 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.71428571429 5.70786347227 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251894590615 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931783024845 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717615782745 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114314962944 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725215588168 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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