An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
An international development organization has come forward with a solution to cure the vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus. The solution is, a newly engineered breed of millet which is contains high amount of vitamin A.
However, there is not enough evidence to prove that this newly engineered millet has no other side effects and will not harm its consumer. It is plausible that side effects (if any) may or may not be handled by the consumer, thus worsening the situation of impecunious people of Tagus. It is not suitable to treat citizens of Tagus as test subjects of newly engineered millet.
Since millet is already common food in Tagus, the international development organization presumes that people of Tagus will readily adopt this new variety of millet in their regular cuisine. In order for this to occur, the organization has offered subsidies to farmers to mass produce this newly produced species of millet, which costs more than regular millet.
While vitamin A deficiency is a severe problem, and boosting vitamin A seems to be a plausible solution, it cannot be concretely concluded that this new species of millet will exactly replicate other nutritional content of regular millet, and not entirely focus only on boosting of vitamin A.
In addition to this, only farmers are paid for buying subsidies of millet, but this does not specify the market cost of it. Even after paying farmers for subsidies, if regular millet is cheaper than this newly harvested vitamin A rich millet, citizens of Tagus will blatantly choose the regular millet based on their financial condition. Which makes the mass production of this new species completely redundant, which will result in a huge loss of already impoverished farmers.
If government of Tagus puts everything to promote this new type of millet, there is no strong insight that they will get a commensurate response because of the aforementioned reasons; and the aftereffects of this new type of millet are skeptical due to lack of evidences.
Finally, it can be said that the fact that this new species is not tested undermines the mass production of this new type of millet as it does not promise entire sale of the harvest. Also, there is no enough evidence to anticipate the response of citizens of Tagus to adopt this new variety. Farmers who are own paid subsidies of this crop are more likely to go into loss because of high cost of this millet. The international development organization must provide more concrete and promising insights for the government to promote this new variety of millet.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2128 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.719 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.027 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.685 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch is contains high amount of vitamin A. However, there is not enough evidence to...
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Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...amin A seems to be a plausible solution, it cannot be concretely concluded that t...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ely focus only on boosting of vitamin A. In addition to this, only farmers are pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, thus, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03225806452 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76905613078 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437788018433 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2941146458 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.125 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.598899299692 0.218282227539 274% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20598123014 0.0743258471296 277% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757257551793 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305314845659 0.128457276422 238% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753788181099 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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