The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Skateboarding is a popular sport among young children, usually boys. A skateboard is nothing but a board, with 2 to 4 wheels attached to it, and it is used with help of our feet. Even though toddlers use skateboard to play with and have fun, it actually has a use. Whenever we have to go out for some work, skateboards can actually be helpful as an alternative to walking. It saves time and energy, and it also helps in balancing our body, making it a perfectly healthy sport for everyone.
Statistics suggest that over the pass two years, popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. This is not surprising given the aforementioned benefits of skateboarding. However, owners of Central Plaza have faced a steady decrease in their business, and skateboarding seems to be the reason of it. Shop owners believe that if they are able to check the users of skateboard in the area, their business will go up to previous levels of zenith.
On the other hand, there is no suffecient evidence to prove that downfall of Central Plaza's business is only because of skateboarding community in the area. Factors like poor service, unpleasant ambience and quality of products at sale must also be considered. If the store owners do not satisfy their customer with a proper service, they are likely to lose their business by losing their customers.
In addition to this, the dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza can also be one of the reasons why customers don't visit their. If the plaza is not clean and pleasant, no one would like to come and shop for their goods. Blaming skateboard users for this litter and vandalism is a baseless accusation, as anyone can contribute to the littering of the plaza.
It must be acknowledged that, with dramatic increase in skateboard users, the plaza is always crowded with people and thus makes it difficult for buyers to go around and purchase their groceries and other necessities. Such crowding has always been a major problem for shop owners. Also, with many people having access to the skateboard, they can easily travel to other supermarkets to buy other stuff; thereby decreasing the business of Central Plaza.
If the city prohibits skateboarding in Central Plaza, then children and other users might not have a proper place to practice this sport and maintain a healthy lifestyle.
Also, by considering factors which were mentioned earlier like poor service and lack of quality, there is no assurance that the business will return to its previous state after banning skateboarding in the Plaza; it will remain same as before because of obvious reasons. Also, there is no guarantee that Plaza will be clean after skateboarding is closed. Anyone can throw garbage anywhere at any time.
Finally, framing skateboard users as culprits of downfall in one's business is proposterous. One must also consider other factors such as service and quality of the product. People do not like to come to places with unpleasant litter spreaded everywhere, so lacking the ability to clean the Plaza can also be one of the reasons of decrease in business, and skateboard users can not be only reason for that. More emphasis is required on the assessment of quality and service provided by shop owners in plaza, and the cleanliness system of the plaza. After considering all other factors mentioned earlier, the city must take a decision on prohibiting the skateboard users.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 578 350
No. of Characters: 2798 1500
No. of Different Words: 261 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.903 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.841 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.407 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.04 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.704 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.28 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 148, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...lso be one of the reasons why customers dont visit their. If the plaza is not clean ...
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Line 14, column 62, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...eboard users as culprits of downfall in ones business is proposterous. One must also...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, so, then, thus, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 55.5748502994 158% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2881.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 577.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99306759099 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77599271296 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 204.123752495 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466204506066 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 909.9 705.55239521 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2382953988 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.703703704 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3703703704 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.62962962963 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210719852526 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641118822879 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058524590926 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114629533489 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504866409763 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 98.500998004 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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