An international development organization in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A While seeds for this new type of millet cost more farmers will be paid | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

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There have been growing concerns in Tagus over the deficiency of vitamin A amongst its general populace. Many efforts are being made to find a solution to this problem. The national research team has also teamed up with international development organization to find a solution. Recently, there has been some progress with the international development team claiming to have developed a new breed of millet which has high Vitamin A content. They propose that the government of Tagus should promote growing this millet breed to tackle the Vitamin deficiency problem. However there re certain factors that need consideration before it can be concluded that this indeed would be efficacious.

Firstly, the new breed of millet is high in Vitamin A content, but does this implicitly mean that consuming this new breed of millet will also increase the Vitamin A content in human body? This needs to be examined, although it might be true that the new millet has high Vitamin A, but how much proportion of it would be consumed by the body is important. There needs to be a study on how does the human body react and use the new millet to extract vitamins and other useful substances from it. The recommendation says that giving farmers subsidies would encourage them to buy and plan this new type of millet. There is no information given on how readily available this new seeds are. Since it is mentioned that this new breed has been engineered, it is important to know the amount of these engineered seeds already available and how easy/difficult is it to produce them.

Another assumption that since millet is a staple food people will adopt the new breed without hesitation. The people need to be made aware about why they are being asked to plant this new breed and delineate the benefits of it. Does this new breed of millet contain all necessary nutrients present in the older breeds of millet? It would not be a good result if the new breed gives more Vitamin A but deprives the body of nutrients that were available from the old breed. Another factor that needs consideration is once planted would the new millet crops grow well? Since this is an engineered seed, would it grow the same way in open fields as it does in laboratory conditions. The weather and soil conditions are vital for growth of any plants. Will the climate of Tagus fields be suitable for its growth, is a question that needs consideration.

While it might be true that this new breed of millet indeed contains high Vitamin A, the government of Tagus before promoting it should consider all the questions discussed above. They should have a thorough analysis of these factors and only then arrive at a conclusion. If all these factors fit in, then definitely this new breed of millet does sound promising in solving the Vitamin A deficiency problem of the populace of Tagus.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 567, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... tackle the Vitamin deficiency problem. However there re certain factors that need cons...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: A_BUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
...ult if the new breed gives more Vitamin A but deprives the body of nutrients that wer...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, well, while, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 491.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82077393075 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62868811442 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454175152749 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0514230506 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.913043478 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.347826087 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04347826087 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.513490352537 0.218282227539 235% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156466794475 0.0743258471296 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082999962109 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327243443751 0.128457276422 255% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410554134358 0.0628817314937 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, well, while, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments