An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author said in the prompt that the impoverished nation of Tagus is in great crisis of vitamin A . To alleviate this crisis, an international organization suggested to cultivate a new breed of millet that is abundant in vitamin A. As, the breed requires greater cost, the organization suggested that farmers should be paid subsidies while government should do everything to mitigate the crisis and promote the new type of millet. to ensure the result following questions are to be thought and answered accurately:
First of all, the most concerning question might be how can the government ensure the enough fund to help the farmers? So, to ensure the fund, government needs to get funds from other sectors of the nation. Like; health sector, foreign policy sector, income taxes, and so on. the government should also focus on the fact that the subsidies must be distributed to the farmers properly.
Another question is that How to restrict the corruption to distribute the funds to the farmers? in this case, Government should employ more scrupulous persons in this sector on whom the government can rely. because, if the corruption is not prevented, the farmers will not get the subsidies properly and as a result, they can not afford the millets on their own.
in addition to the above discussion, another question could be raised- how to teach the farmers to cultivate this type of millet if there is a unique characteristic of this type of millet? - if the millet require possess special characteristics, the farmers should be taught by arranging seminars provincially. in this seminar the characteristics and unique criterias might be taught.
in conclusion, the government can imply all these discussions to take necessary steps to mitigate the vitamin A deficiency.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 291 350
No. of Characters: 1448 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.13 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.976 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.87 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.842 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.39 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.638 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the prompt that the impoverished nation of Tagus is in great crisis of vitamin A...
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Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...of Tagus is in great crisis of vitamin A . To alleviate this crisis, an internatio...
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Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested cultivating'.
Suggestion: suggested cultivating
...s crisis, an international organization suggested to cultivate a new breed of millet that is abundant ...
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Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...sis and promote the new type of millet. to ensure the result following questions a...
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Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...to distribute the funds to the farmers? in this case, Government should employ mor...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...sector on whom the government can rely. because, if the corruption is not prevented, th...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ot afford the millets on their own. in addition to the above discussion, anoth...
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Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ght by arranging seminars provincially. in this seminar the characteristics and un...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
... and unique criterias might be taught. in conclusion, the government can imply al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 291.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13745704467 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94495941196 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518900343643 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0780023413 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.785714286 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311294729467 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107030423694 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956471127877 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162097106475 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133599003882 0.0628817314937 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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