An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument that is broached here is that in response to the deficiency of Vitamin-A among the people of impoverished nation of Tagus, an international development organization has engineered a new breed of millet that is high in Vitamin - A. Though this millet is costlier than the already available in market, farmers will be paid subsidies by the government and because the millet is the staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt to this new variety of seed. The argument emphasized that the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. I opine that the available data is inadequate to reach at any conclusion. For instance, is there any scientific research on this millet? Was this breed of Millet authorized by the health agencies at national and international level? Will the seed grow properly? And will there be adequate harvest to feed everyone in this impoverished country?
The success of this plan is based on the subsidies that will be provided to the farmers as the seed is costly. Now that's a plan whose validity is suspected. How will the subsidies provided? Will they credit the amount in the farmers banks? If yes, how will the farmers make the initial payment of the seed which is market value of that seed as they are already impoverished and poor. Will the distribution agency be successful in providing subsidy to each and every farmer of the country? Therefore the plan of distribution of subsidy money has to be evaluated well.
The argument is then bolstered by the premise that the Millet is the staple food of the people of Tagus and people of Tagus will surely adopt them. I feel that this argument seems to be an extrapolation. It is possible that the taste of the harvest of this new seed differs and people may not like it. It is emphasized in the passage that the government of Tagus should do everything to combat the deficiency of vitamin-A. It is possible that in such a impoverished nation like one as Tagus there may exist other deficiencies among people which government has to look after. If all the resources are spent to combat only the deficiency of Vitamin-A, how will they fight other problems?
A thought must be given about the production of this seed. Is there any scientific research available to bolster the claim that the millet is vitamin-A enrich?
Will this seed produce enough millet that can feed the entire country? and Will this seed grow in the environment of Tagus, otherwise all the efforts undertaken to combat this deficiency will be futile. It must be further evaluated that the seed should be given green flag by the health authorities nationally and internationally.
So, if the plan is to combat this deficiency proper measures should be taken and any decision that this based on inadequate data will produce only futile repercussions. Any important decision related to public health should be taken after due diligence and only after considering all the facts, therefore i believe that the concerned authorities should analyze this proposal well and must consider all the variables before giving a green light.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 531 350
No. of Characters: 2551 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.8 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.804 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.697 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.772 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.476 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...aple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt to this new variety of seed. The argument ...
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Line 1, column 923, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...st to feed everyone in this impoverished country? The success of this plan is...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... the farmers as the seed is costly. Now thats a plan whose validity is suspected. How...
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Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...o each and every farmer of the country? Therefore the plan of distribution of subsidy mon...
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Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to combat the deficiency of vitamin-A. It is possible that in such a impoverished...
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Line 5, column 452, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... vitamin-A. It is possible that in such a impoverished nation like one as Tagus t...
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Line 8, column 71, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...illet that can feed the entire country? and Will this seed grow in the environment ...
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Line 10, column 306, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...er considering all the facts, therefore i believe that the concerned authorities ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.9520958084 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2607.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90960451977 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75264161666 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.395480225989 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.9 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.8906316138 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1071428571 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9642857143 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.64285714286 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.484270123963 0.218282227539 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133378380079 0.0743258471296 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11378948254 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249427086881 0.128457276422 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168125420286 0.0628817314937 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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