There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and
greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that the relaxed pace of life in Leeville allows residents to live longer, healthier lives.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could
rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly
account for the facts presented in the argument
The author provides many pieces of evidences to support his claim that relaxed pace of life promotes better health and greater longevity and I don’t contend to the claims as bolstered by the author, but certainly I would like to question the authenticity of the reasons provided to reinforce the conclusion. The author states that fewer sick leaves were taken by the residents of Leeville , a small town than the sick leaves taken by the people of Masonton, a large city but the data seems to be apocryphal. We might question whether the study was large enough to draw broader conclusions? The population of Leeville would be less as compared to the population of Masonton. So if it is said that the sick leaves taken by residents of Leeville are less than those of Masonton and this shows that this shows better health, then the conclusion is flawed because no way the population of these two cities are comparable.
The another reason provided by the author to support his conclusion is that the Leeville has only one physician over 1000 residents but Masonton has 5 times higher but again the reason seems to be flawed as if the population of Leeville is less which is most probable as it is a small town than there will be less physicians due to the low population and government would be reluctant to appoint more physicians unnecessary unless required. So the argument that bolsters the conclusion is inaccurate as other aspects such as demographics are not specified at all. Population of the cities is germane to this argument.
The third reason that is provided by the author that average life of people of Leeville is higher than those of Masonton, but the base value for computation of average life is not same as the population of both the places differs a lot.so the three reasons that were provided to support this conclusion are seems to be completely flawed and the conclusion seems to be apocryphal.
Furthermore, many other factors such as Demographics, Lifestyle, eating habits, death rate, hospitalisation rates and other causes are not considered by the author while reaching at the conclusion. If eating habits of the people of larger city are better then those of Leville then they may live a longer life than those of Leville. The Lifestyle also influences your better health it may be possible that the lifestyle of the people of small town is not good , it is possible that people of that town are addicted to drugs and intoxicants and people of Masonton lives a good lifestyle, they might invest some of their time in gymnasium doing exercises. The Death rate is not taken into account while reaching at any conclusion, it is possible that the death rate of Leville is higher or may be the hospitalisation rates are higher than those of big city. If all these factors were taken into account, then there lies a possibility that the conclusion might be something else. Moreover, the big question is whether the factors covered represents the whole population?
While this argument presents an interesting hypothesis , the data presented is not strong enough to establish the validity of the conclusion ever to a smaller degree.so this argument seems to be completely flawed and the data is inaccurate and incomplete. The argument raises a question whether the pursuit of this hypothesis was good utilisation of time, funds and attention.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 572 350
No. of Characters: 2751 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.89 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.809 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.674 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 109 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.587 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.346 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 389, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... were taken by the residents of Leeville , a small town than the sick leaves taken...
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Line 1, column 632, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...he population of Leeville would be less as compared to the population of Masonton....
^^
Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun physicians is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...s it is a small town than there will be less physicians due to the low population an...
^^^^
Line 4, column 198, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uthor while reaching at the conclusion. If eating habits of the people of larger c...
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Line 4, column 248, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'better than'?
Suggestion: better than
...habits of the people of larger city are better then those of Leville then they may live a l...
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Line 4, column 459, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... of the people of small town is not good , it is possible that people of that town...
^^
Line 4, column 539, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wn are addicted to drugs and intoxicants and people of Masonton lives a good life...
^^
Line 4, column 637, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t invest some of their time in gymnasium doing exercises. The Death rate is not t...
^^
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ument presents an interesting hypothesis , the data presented is not strong enough...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, then, third, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.6327345309 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2798.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 571.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90017513135 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75297929026 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.392294220665 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 894.6 705.55239521 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.037363896 57.8364921388 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.588235294 119.503703932 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5882352941 23.324526521 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204079771016 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064100344456 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738989725853 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109597280561 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988989126395 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 14.3799401198 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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