The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The argument put forth in this prompt is that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent induviduals. Luxuries are the facilities that are not essential for your survival but they makes you life more easier, comfortable. I mostly agrees to the argument as i opine that the luxuries and conveniences have made us lethargic and lead to torpor,but it is not true in all the cases as there are many people who makes the full utilization of these resources at their end and make the best use of them. Well it depends on one's perception about using these luxuries. For instance, destitute children provided with luxuries may make proper utilization of them and become successful and an independent person. A good player provided with luxuries may get the best benefit out of it or he may get habitual of them and may do not want to develop his sports skills anymore.
These luxuries make people feckless. People using mobile phones or stuck with their laptops may become irresponsible. Luxuries like gaming make children so much involved in it, that they do not want come out of that fictional world and understand the reality of this planet. People are provided with high speed internet and a plethora of online streaming content that makes them feckless and lethargic and they do not get involved in any physical or mental activity that may lead their physical or mental development.
Children have less height, they are obese. What do you think are the causes of this poor physique? I am sure one of the cause would be television, air conditioners, phones that are provided at their disposal for their entertainment. But one of the repercussion of these unwanted facilities is their less growth. if the children were not provided such superfluous equipments they would play in playgrounds and this will result in better physique.
Since these luxuries and conveniences may lead to less growth but it is not necessary that it happens to everyone! It depends how people make use of the resources that are provided them.No doubt when there exist scarcity of resources human will work in the direction to get them and this will lead to growth but there are people who makes the best use of these facilities.A scientist provided with these facilities will work for new innovations and development in the field of technology. A good student provided with these facilities may utilize them to achieve the growth.These facilities have helped people work efficiently too. For example , Air conditioners in the office will make the work easier for the people working and there are many more such instances too.
Well it is not general or pervasive that luxuries will prevent people from being strong and independent citizens it really depends how people make best utilization of such facilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...ot essential for your survival but they makes you life more easier, comfortable. I mo...
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Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...r your survival but they makes you life more easier, comfortable. I mostly agrees to the ar...
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Line 1, column 304, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'agree'
Suggestion: agree
...life more easier, comfortable. I mostly agrees to the argument as i opine that the lux...
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Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ble. I mostly agrees to the argument as i opine that the luxuries and convenience...
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Line 1, column 414, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...ave made us lethargic and lead to torpor,but it is not true in all the cases as ther...
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Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...wanted facilities is their less growth. if the children were not provided such sup...
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Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: No
...of the resources that are provided them.No doubt when there exist scarcity of reso...
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Line 7, column 373, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
... makes the best use of these facilities.A scientist provided with these facilitie...
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Line 7, column 575, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
... may utilize them to achieve the growth.These facilities have helped people work effi...
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Line 7, column 644, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...people work efficiently too. For example , Air conditioners in the office will mak...
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Line 9, column 143, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'make the best'.
Suggestion: make the best
...t citizens it really depends how people make best utilization of such facilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, really, so, well, for example, for instance, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2390.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 477.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01048218029 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7349682118 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438155136268 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 100.869323873 60.3974514979 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.789473684 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1052631579 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16577896825 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639908195901 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789347725741 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106399363792 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741761844205 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.