An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
There are many additional sources needed in order for it to be appropriate that the Government of Tagus should accomplish everything in its power to promote the new type of millet. Comprehensive surveys stating the anticipated full wide adoption of the new millet by the people of Tagus, an array of scientific evidence from different patients proving that there are no adverse effects of the new type of millet and lastly, a vast number of organizations trying to create a new cheaper variety of millet, are all necessary for the Government of Tagus to promote the new millet.
The prompt states that because millet is a staple food in Tagus then people will adopt the new variety of millet. If something is a staple food in a place, that does not mean every single person in that place is in favor of the creation of the food. For example, if hot dogs were the staple food in New York, that does not mean that I, a resident of New York, will like a hot dog and support the production of hot dogs. Therefore, people will not necessarily adopt the new millet just because it is a staple food in Tagus.
Many comprehensive surveys are needed from the people of Tagus in order to find out the extent of how many people are willing to adopt the new type of millet. This will allow the Government of Tagus to see if the promotion of this new type of millet is worth the nation's time and money. If many surveys show that the people are not willing to adopt the new millet even with the possible subsidies than the Government should not promote the new type of millet.
The new breed of millet that is high in vitamin A may have an adverse effect on the poor nation of Tagus. For example, the new millet could help the Vitamin A deficient people of Tagus however, it may cause others to gain a deficiency to another essential Vitamin. I cannot know from this short passage whether or not the new millet has been thoroughly tested by scientists and doctors. Only after the new millet has been examined and tested by many patients over many years and proven to be safe and healthy can the Government be allowed to risk the lives of the people of Tagus.
One may argue that by holding back this new millet, the impoverished people of Tagus might suffer. However, I would argue that if the Government of Tagus gives the people of Tagus this new millet and it proves to be detrimental to their health, the millet can have worse health effects on the people than they had before.
Also, many organizations must try to engineer a new breed of millet high in vitamin A in order to discover a cheaper alternative to the new millet. If a cheaper millet is engineered then this new millet can help the poor nation of Tagus use it's money to buy food and other essential items. Also, if another cheaper millet is engineered then the Government can use it's money to help the Tagus economy instead of using the money to subsidize the expensive new variety of millet.
In conclusion, in order for the promotion of the new type of millet to be justifiable, surveys showing the future adoption of the millet, scientific evidence from an array of patients proving the safety of the millet and the trial of engineering a new cheaper millet by many organizations must be made.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...of this new type of millet is worth the nations time and money. If many surveys show th...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...et is worth the nations time and money. If many surveys show that the people are n...
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Line 7, column 304, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
.... I cannot know from this short passage whether or not the new millet has been thoroughly test...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, lastly, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 92.0 55.5748502994 166% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2681.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 589.0 441.139720559 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55178268251 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45614009008 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.351443123939 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 861.3 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.269571351 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.105263158 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 23.324526521 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.482362201612 0.218282227539 221% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213767760037 0.0743258471296 288% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829965796046 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29502746325 0.128457276422 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596930410038 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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