An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

According to the International Development organization, there is a deficiency of vitamin A among the people Tagus. The author states various remedies about how to come over this deficiency. However, the article has certain unexplained points which should be clarified before its approval.

To start with, the author mentions about the deficiency of vitamin A alone whereas nowhere states that about how these results were obtained. Not only the number of people, but also what category of people were tested is not mentioned. This throws light on the fact that, apart from deficiency of vitamin A there might be deficiency of other vitamins too. Also, it might so happen that the only a part of the whole is deficient of vitamin A.

Secondly, while the new breed of millet is high in Vitamin A, it does not give any information about the other nutritional value. If people completely depend on this new breed, it might so happen that the deficiency of vitamin A would be fulfilled, however the people of the nation would be deficient of some other vitamin.

Thirdly, there is no numeric value for the costs of the new breed and also the subsidies given to the farmers. If the costs of the new breed is skyrocketing, whereas the subsidies given to the farmers are way to low compared to the prices, the farmers wont cultivate the breed and the village would never come out of vitamin deficiency A.

Also, the author states that the millet is a staple food for the people of the nation. However, the author does not mention if the nutritional content, the taste, the method of cooking and other factors are same as the new breed. If not, the staple food of the nation would be under attack and so would be the people.

Lastly, the author states that the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new plant, although it gives only one such solution for overcoming the problem. The author must specify more solutions, and give more options to select from.

Hence, if the author clears all this information along with the article, only then would a correct decision be made whether implementing the new breed would be beneficial or not.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('there') instead an adjective, or a noun ('might') instead of another adjective.
... that, apart from deficiency of vitamin A there might be deficiency of other vitamins too. Al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas, while, apart from, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81016042781 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52096502613 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473262032086 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9171128692 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.823529412 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402479814284 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131788994848 0.0743258471296 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964538582432 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190349658862 0.128457276422 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836235519761 0.0628817314937 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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