An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The author's claim to increase the production of the new variety of millet in Tagus in order to combat a deficiency among the natives does not wholly make a cogent argument to persuade the government to help in promoting the new type of millet . The author's argument is certainly rife with holes and underlying assumptions and various questions that need to prove their recommendations.

Firstly, the author states that there is deficiency of vitamin A among the people of Tagus, which leads him to claim as the reason behind why a new breed of millet rich in Vitamin A was engineered. Although the question that arises here is that how many people were a part of the survey and what were the age groups that took part?. What if only the highly impoverished people of an age group above 60 years were surveyed. As it is during the old age, an individual possesses some deficiencies which are sometimes also prescribed by a doctor. Also, what if only a few people of poverty stricken area in Tagus were surveyed by the organization. All these underlying assumptions need to elucidated by the author and a proper proof of a normed survey must be mentioned.

Secondly, the author insists on growing this new type of crop in Tagus. Which crops essentially constitute the nation's economic trade? Is millet the only crop that Tagus exports?. One can certainly assume here that even if the farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet,the decrease in the number of other crops that the nation produces or is capable of producing will surely not have a positive impact on the nations economic growth in the global market. Therefore, the author must specify firstly the economic value of the new type of millet in order to sustain the nation's growth it the global market. The author must also confirm if millet is the also one of the crops that the nation exports.

Aditionally, another question that arises here is that, is Millet traded in the economic market or is only produced in the nation as a staple food for the natives?. If this is the case, then, expanding the growth of millet in Tagus would hinder its position in the global market and might result in a downfall of the nations economic value. Thus, the author must take into consideration, all the aspects and repercussions of the solution.

Hence, in the end, if all the questions are answered and all the underlying assumptions are validated with cogency, the author's solution can be considered as a probable effect in helping the nation's native's health requirements.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 440.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81590909091 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65832375332 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461363636364 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0950494028 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.722222222 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4444444444 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31820007105 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977479953061 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785673114395 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153705369147 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717304156073 0.0628817314937 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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