It has been noted over the past two years that the incidence of vandalism has steadily increasing in carlton country. At the same time, it has been noted that there is a dramatic increase in out-of-state migrants who have moved to carlton country over the past few years. Many citizens of the country believe that these migrants are responsible for the observed increase to reduce the number od out-of-state migrants in order to prevent further destruction of public property and restore civic order in Carlton country
In the given argument author put his thought on and give some suggestions here to the government that may help to prevent the further destruction of public property and restore civic order in Carlton country. But here the author missed some areas to focus on, let's see some of the facts and areas which would have a better impact here.
Here the author says that it has been noted over the past two years that the incidents of vandalism have steadily increased in Carlton County. we can not say this without any evidence to some figures which can clearly say that vandalism has got increased steadily in the past two years. and also we don't know that before two years these many cases were happening in Carlton country. Instead of that author should focus on the other area where he didn't come with the assumptions or any kind of predictions by which he claims before this was the situation and now we are having such trouble maybe because of these things.
Again author tried to make some predictions here by saying that it has been noted that there is a dramatic increase in out-of-state migrants who moved to Carlton country over the past two years, Even if we consider here that some migrations may happen in the past two years but considering authors statement it seems to be predicted. again due to a lack of evidence. the author says many citizens are saying that these migrations are happening due to vandalism. but there can be some other thing too that may force people to migrate. there has to be some issue with the facilities provided by the government which may not fulfill their expectations, and it may also happen that many of the citizens could not accept the environment of Carlton country and that may cause the migration, so considering these points we can say these can be some of the areas which may have an impact to people and due to this they are migrating.
Therefor author gives a suggestion here wich may reduce the number of migration in the country. suggesting the government author says that, coutnry government should take strick measures to reduce the number of out-of-state migrants in oder to preven further destructions of public property and restore the civic, which again seems the inappropriate way to resuce the migration by setting som limitation on it insteaed government should undertans the concern of people and provide them the facility accordingly so they won't migrate.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 1982 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.708 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.469 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 52.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.454 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.448 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.71 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.249 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... harm for ous at the time, it may cause in a different way, so I would like to put my opinion from...
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Line 1, column 494, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...at the same time, opposing it. lets see some of the points that the author missed to mentio...
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Line 3, column 42, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... would like to accept the given thought in a positive way by accepting it, like id we take an exa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... an example of todays generation people are depending more and more on the technology to make...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ion they may phase several difficulties in future. here we can take the example of a calc...
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Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
...y phase several difficulties in future. here we can take the example of a calculator...
^^^^
Line 3, column 562, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to reason'?
Suggestion: to reason
... ous to think for the easy calculations too reason people are getting more addicted to suc...
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Line 3, column 686, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Instead
...pact on their lifestyle by unknowingly. instead, we should take the advantage of techno...
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Line 3, column 820, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...r daily life easy and faster than ever. but keeping the thought in mind that if som...
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Line 3, column 950, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ime, it may cause you in different ways also. We as humans wanted to involve in e...
^^^^
Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Technology
...olutions on every problem by one click. technology is not a bad thing for ous or relying o...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...fe and why we should not rely on it. so lets have look in some areas where we can fi...
^^^^
Line 7, column 614, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'many kinds'.
Suggestion: many kinds
...ining the 100 percent accuracy tere are many kind of thing like this in our life which he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 500.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34 5.05705443957 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41403893921 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.61021877 60.3974514979 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.0 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.7142857143 23.4991977007 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222519747496 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101729531009 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150320689014 0.0758088955206 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119804989825 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106018558693 0.0667264976115 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.48 12.1639044944 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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