Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
In the given issue, the author has pointed towards an important aspect of society. I agree to some extent with the author's claim that young people should be taught the values of cooperation rather than competition, since its the best thing to do to maintain peace and harmony in the society amongst different leaders. But, I also believe that a hint of competition in society keeps everyone afloat. Competition proves to be great sometimes to upgrade, learn, and grow and to keep the sense of "game on" in the society.
I strongly believe that cooperation between peers or even industries is something that is lacking in today's world. Everyone, may it be in politics or corporates is trying to pull one another's legs or trying to suppress one another. This is a misleading example of what competition means and the way we deal with it. People today have forgotten to help one another and are running behind selfish gains. The idea to grow and let grow has been forgotten. If the young people of today are taught the values of cooperation, this will prove to be of great significance in creating a productive and peaceful environment in the society. As we all know, the development of a society is defined by the leaders in the field of government, industry, education, and the way they handle their position, it is important for the cooperation part to be inculcated in them.
While cooperation is good for harmony, competition is good to keep the game afloat. If competition is not present, very little room is left for development. Like I mentioned above, competition is misunderstood as rivalry and is dealt with practices of suppressing one another. Whereas, if taken with the right perspective, competition can prove to be one of the fruitful practices to keep growing and developing. If we look at Apple and Samsung, both of them are the leading industries in the world of smartphones. They have an almost equal fan-base. But, what is fascinating is that both companies always strive to launch products that are one of a kind. Due, to the fruitful competition perspective, they are able to grow and expand and reach new limits in the field of technology. Therefore, not just competition but healthy competition is something that young minds should be made aware of.
If both of these values - Cooperation and Healthy Competition are inculcated in the young minds of the society, the development of the society will reach new heights. Following these two values, the leaders of tomorrow will able to create a very productive and growing environment around them. This will help society to shift towards a whole new domain of the culture.
Therefore, addressing the author's claim, and changing the definition of what really competition should mean and how to replace it with healthy competition, the values of cooperation and competition will help the society to improve a lot.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...peration rather than competition, since its the best thing to do to maintain peace ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, really, so, therefore, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98765432099 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88893826002 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458847736626 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2349189651 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220427717858 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575048394176 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420805086301 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125652521543 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297351779808 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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