Keating launched a widely viewed series of television advertisements that focused on preservingthe natural environment of Town T, a topic neglected by candidate Miller. Subsequently, candidateKeating won the election by a narrow margin.This year, if candi

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Keating launched a widely viewed series of television advertisements that focused on preserving
the natural environment of Town T, a topic neglected by candidate Miller. Subsequently, candidate
Keating won the election by a narrow margin.
This year, if candidate Miller hopes to win the upcoming mayoral election, he must increase his
coverage of the topic of preserving the natural environment of Town T.

The author states that candidate Miller will win the upcoming mayoral election if he more coverages the topic of preserving the natural environment of town T. In the previous election the candidate Keat launched some advertisements that focused on preserving the natural environment of the town T and won the election last minute though candidate Miller lead in polls. Although the overall hypothesis is interesting but it has some flawed. Moreover, for accurate conclusion needs some critical assumption which draws an accurate conclusion and rejects the incorrect assumption.

Firstly, candidate Miller led candidate Keating in polls of the previous election but still defeated. But, how is it possible? Because the polls result depends on the overall statistical result of peoples opinion. It may fluctuate but cannot be changed in the last minute. So, if the author relies on the result it may be undermined the statement. Moreover, the candidate Miller encouraged voter by more closely and knows more what the peoples of the town T required. Whereas, candidate
Keat is more busy with television advertisement. It is true that media can influence the people but nowadays people also know these type of promotion is quite deceptive.

The Second issue the author states that candidate Keat launched a series of television advertisements that focused on preserving the natural environment. But, only preserve nature cannot bring fortune for a town. It must be included to recreate and revive the damaged nature. For instances, a river of town T is preserved carefully with its own beauty
but it will not attractive to the people if there is no additional recreation like swimming, drifting etc. Moreover, attraction can bring more tourist and can earn more in the field of tourism.

The third problem, only natural preservation advertisement cannot be the indication of the success in the election. Candidates also focus on the other development of the town T. For example, the candidate can take a step for unemployment problem in the town, can improve road, can aware people from road accidents or aware child abuses etc. This may lead a candidate to win the election.

To conclude, the statement contains some critical flaws and without correct it cannot be validated and moreover, the statement required more information. After all these correction we can get a correct conclusion.

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Average: 5.9 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...till defeated. But, how is it possible? Because the polls result depends on the overall...
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Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t cannot be changed in the last minute. So, if the author relies on the result it may ...
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hat the peoples of the town T required. Whereas, candidate Keat is more busy with tele...
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he statement required more information. After all these correction we can get a corre...
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Message: Did you mean 'this correction' or 'these corrections'?
Suggestion: this correction; these corrections
...nt required more information. After all these correction we can get a correct conclusion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, third, whereas, after all, for example, for instance, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27415143603 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89148193966 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501305483029 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2938782533 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8260869565 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.652173913 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.60869565217 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232601600587 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07031941313 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992507236014 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103344143406 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.092634034922 0.0628817314937 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 1965 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.131 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.808 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.427 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.895 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.292 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5