Some people believe that competition drives young athletes to perform at their best, while others believe that competitiondiscourages those who are not athletically talented from participating in organized sports.

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Some people believe that competition drives young athletes to perform at their best, while others believe that competition
discourages those who are not athletically talented from participating in organized sports.

The author presents two conflict beliefs which both two are not inaccurate, one catalyst will draw out athletes best performance and other is daunt who have not athletically talented. I think both beliefs are accurate for their own situation but, competition is essential to perform at their best.

Today's world is full of competition and is difficult to achieve a goal. Competition can encourage an athlete to perform his or her best. Suppose, an athlete won a national trophy and this performance encourage him to achieve an international trophy. Thus, to win the competition he or she more practice to bolster the performance. Moreover, it is the place where an athlete can show his or her talent.

The second conflicting factor is also correct because the competition discourages those who are not athletically talented when participating in organized sports. Without athletically talented people do not practice the physical exercise every day; so it is a weakness of them. Moreover, talented athletes show their ability in the competition; so non-athletes people sometimes feel inferior and guilty which discourage them to perform in the competition. Thus, to win the competition one non-athletes should more practice and gain confidence.

However, competition is essential to boost up performance but over the competition is not beneficent. Because over competition sometimes create conflicting action between two competitors. Over-competition can lead a match fixation or other unethical activities like taking drugs to boost up the performance. Moreover, overpressure by the coach might draw depression which hinders the performance of an athlete.

To the sum, the presented statement of the author is flip-flop means if one happens that others will happen. Both are the true fact that has a different implication. Both are necessary for the success of adults. Competition is vital to encourages an athleteperformance but over competitive mind can hinder an athlete performance.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'athletes the best'.
Suggestion: athletes the best
... inaccurate, one catalyst will draw out athletes best performance and other is daunt who have...
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Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'daunted'.
Suggestion: daunted
... athletes best performance and other is daunt who have not athletically talented. I t...
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Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... an athlete can show his or her talent. The second conflicting factor is also co...
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Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...over the competition is not beneficent. Because over competition sometimes create confl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 307.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51465798046 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28470903041 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537459283388 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2308810553 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1052631579 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1578947368 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10526315789 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318680764856 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966663052057 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750899464983 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175187692595 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860477273631 0.0667264976115 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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