Some people believe that competition drives young athletes to perform at their best, while others believe that competition discourages those who are not athletically talented from participating in organized sports.
For any person, the key to success is rectifying the mistakes and improving his/her performance in the future. The statement posits two different views regarding the competition as some people believe that it is vital for any athlete to give his/her best while some people argue that competition discourages those athletes who are not able to perform well. While the competition may discourage some of the athletes but it is a primary requirement for improvement.
To begin with, there are many circumstances when any person tries to perform well in every attempt but due to some reasons, he/she is not able to improve. At this time, anyone will feel discouraged by seeing other people’s performance. But many factors are affecting the performance of any people. For instance, if any person likes swimming and consequently, he/she decided to be a good swimmer, then it is likely that he/she will compare herself/himself with that of the best swimmer in the world. Eventually, due to this comparison, he/she will probably be demotivated because best swimmers are meticulously trained by professionals and eventually perform exceptionally in their swimming. The above example illustrates that instead of getting demotivated by the top swimmers, the factors responsible for their performance should be considered. After knowing in detail about any field, anyone can make an apt decision and improve.
Furthermore, competition helps any athlete to remain active in his/her sport. If any athlete compares his/her talent with others, then there are chances of improvements in the athlete’s effort because proper comparison elicits many weak areas. For example, Virat Kohli, the Indian Cricketer, in his rudimentary stages of playing cricket, finds many difficulties to face fast bowlers. He used to compare himself with Virendra Sehwag, a former Indian cricketer, to perform better. He can identify many flaws in his batting style and as a result, he tried to rectify his mistakes. As time passes, he can rectify almost ninety per cent of mistakes and eventually became the captain of the Indian cricket team. This shows that if any person maintains a positive attitude towards the competition, then he/she is likely to succeed in his/her efforts. Moreover, competition is a key factor to eradicate laziness from any person. Competing with others at a higher level leads to remain completely focus on the current works and put the fecklessness aside. Thus, as seen in the example, like Virat Kohli, competition helps many athletes to shape their careers effectively.
It can be inferred that, while many people believe that competition leads to discouragement in an athlete's spirit, however, maintaining a positive attitude towards it will likely bring success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34174311927 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93562481672 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525229357798 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2250365975 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.904761905 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7619047619 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283805163304 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896242328565 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10659215437 0.0758088955206 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208056810916 0.150359130593 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111718444552 0.0667264976115 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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