Students are more responsible for their education than are their teachers.
Education plays a vital role in shaping the future of any student. Proper education is fundamental requirement for getting success in life. The prompt posits that students are more responsible for their education as compared to the teachers. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement based on the following reasons.
First of all, self learning is the primary requirement for anyone to learn any new concept. It is the only way by which students can judge their performance and try to perform better next time. Due to this, the role of students on their education is much more important as compares to that of teachers. For instance, one of the greatest personalities Elon Mask, who takes his responsibility of education in order to learn about rockets and after learning all the concepts, related to it, he founded SpaceX company. Even though he failed in his first 2 attempts while launching the rocket into the outer atmosphere, he finally succeeded in his third attempt. He used to learn from his mistake in the first two attempts, and after taking the responsibilities, he tried one more time and eventually succeeded. This example shows that Elon Mask had taken the responsibility of his education to learn something new and something related to his interest. So, taking the responsibility to educate oneself is primary requirement to succeed in life.
Second of all, only students knows their talent and the field in which they are interested more. So, if student takes the responsibility for their education, then they may discover something new, which helps them to make their reputation as well as helping peoples with their discovery. For example, one of the greatest persons of all time, Larry page, the founder of Google, in his early life he used to make different types of software. As describe in the above paragraph, like Elon Mask, he had tried for 4 years to make an algorithm for Google search engine. He had taken the responsibility for its development and as the time passes, he succeeded in his attempt to make the Google search engine quite efficient. Nowadays, in the time of Covid Pandemic, Google is helping more people to learn new concept by just sitting at home. This example shows that, since he had taken the responsibility of his education, he is able to build Google search engine and as a result it is helping the peoples in the time of pandemic.
Of course, teachers are also responsible for student’s education but based on the above reasons the responsibility of students in their education is quite more as compared to that of the teachers. If student takes the responsibility for their education then can they improve a lot from their mistake
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Suggestion:
...n the responsibility for its development and as the time passes, he succeeded in ...
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Suggestion:
...ng the peoples in the time of pandemic. Of course, teachers are also responsible...
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...udents in their education is quite more as compared to that of the teachers. If st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, then, third, well, while, for example, for instance, of course, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 456.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91885964912 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83251763692 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451754385965 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7630721453 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.80952381 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.21951772744 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425151893696 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160094137879 0.0831039109588 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166476077462 0.0758088955206 220% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.362924522233 0.150359130593 241% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170739742051 0.0667264976115 256% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.