Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Education consists of all kinds of activities such as extracurricular, theoretical and practical. All this activities plays a vital role in determining the effectiveness of the students to handle every kind of problems encountered by them in the future. Proper functioning of these activities is primary requirement for any student. The prompt recommends that in the need of funds, schools should cut the funding of the extracurricular activities like sports and the arts. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with the prompt based on the following reasons.
First of all, the importance of extracurricular activities cannot be ignored. It has a lot of benefit in terms of refreshment and interest of the student. For example, after studying whole day in the classroom, every student wants to fresh their mood by doing something different, which is not a part of their field of interest. Extracurricular activities are therefore a primary requirement for the student to act as refreshment and as a result students can focus on their field of interest. Furthermore, extracurricular activities like art inspire many students. For instance, many students can depict their current scenario by the means of drawing and as a result it will help them to relieve the stress.
Second of all, sport is the activity which plays a crucial role in determining the fitness of students. After playing any game, students can feel the difference in their body and realised that the game helped them to stay fit. If any person is fit and fine then, he/she can focus on his/her daily routine. As the focus increase gradually, the efficiency of the student in their study will also increase. If the funding of the sport is cut then there might be many circumstances where a student may get harm while playing any sport due to lack of proper equipments or due to breaking of any equipment. So, proper funding of the sport should be maintained in order to assert the health of the students.
Finally, if the school requires the funds then it can get the funds from the bank as a loan. This is because banks used to support schools in the need of money, as school is regarded as a temple of education. So, instead of cutting the funds from sports or arts, loan should be taken by the school to meet their requirement. Cutting the funds from the extracurricular activity might be beneficial for the school for short term but for a long run, school requires functioning of all types of activities.
In conclusion, it might sounds beneficial for the schools to cut the funding of the extracurricular activities like sports and art but it is likely to backfire. So, schools should look for an alternative approach for collecting funds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9192139738 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9708102698 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449781659389 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9986568263 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9565217391 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9130434783 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30434782609 5.21951772744 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403956401581 0.243740707755 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127224327579 0.0831039109588 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122914156144 0.0758088955206 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268780616217 0.150359130593 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138553796406 0.0667264976115 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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