"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The author states that Humana University is facing huge budget losses and enrollment issues and to solve these issues, he states that they should institute online degrees so that more students can join their classes. The authors comes to this conclusion on the basis of their neighbouring, Omni University. This conclusion stated by the author is reliant on unjustified proofs and certainly not the correct way to solve their issue. There are three questions that needs to be answered before these arguments can prove conclusive and persuasive enough.
Firstly, they need to do a thorough research on why there has been a decrease in enrollmets at Humana University? These problems need to be compiled by the officials by talking to their alumni's and current students so that they can go to the root of these issues. For example, the students who are currently studying at Humana University do not have enough quality teachers. The quality of education might be the biggest issue and for their dismal growth in the recent years. Therefore without these integral issues resolved, the arguments does not hold water and just proves to be superfluous.
Secondly, there is no correlation between Omni and Human University situation. The issues faced by them could be the same but the solution to their problems cannot be common due to a myriad of issues. For example, although they are situated nearby, they could be in different parts of the town. Maybe Humana is surrounded by population while Omni is on the country side where parents are reluctant to send children. So shifting to online classes helped Omni University increase their enrollments but this might not work for Humana, because thier college is not well reputed and their salaries or perquisites are not as good as Omni University, resulting in inferior education and lesser enrollment. Therefore there could be many issues which have not been introspected at, by the offcials.
Thirdly, shifting to online degrees needs to be accepted by the students who are already attending or who are going to attend Humana University. If the students do not have a great experience with the online classes and assessments, then it could prove more deleterious than before. For example, maybe the students accepted the online classes but have severe issues with it, then the University will have to spend more money to understand the underlying issue with the whole online degree system. Thus, this enormous issue of the whole online degree programme, itself suplants the earlier problems of lesser enrollment and leading to even more dire circumstances.
Therefore, the author needs to answer these germane questions and do a detailed systematic review of the case and with that warranted informantion, evaluate the situation, at hand.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2289 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.042 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.586 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.919 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The author states that Humana University...
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Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...re students can join their classes. The authors comes to this conclusion on the basis o...
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Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...nts can join their classes. The authors comes to this conclusion on the basis of thei...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve conclusive and persuasive enough. Firstly, they need to do a thorough rese...
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Line 3, column 40, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'thorough research'.
Suggestion: thorough research
... Firstly, they need to do a thorough research on why there has been a decrease in enr...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...heir dismal growth in the recent years. Therefore without these integral issues resolved,...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r and just proves to be superfluous. Secondly, there is no correlation betwee...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ferior education and lesser enrollment. Therefore there could be many issues which have n...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n introspected at, by the offcials. Thirdly, shifting to online degrees need...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13849765258 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65294878849 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.29794883 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.210526316 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145672745682 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489566058224 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399259476375 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934435132462 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293011659407 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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