The editor concluded that the resources should be invested in unmanned space flight rather than manned. To support his claims, he has listed some reasons. But while listing them the editor is neglecting some assumptions and veritability of some of his claims.
The first argument is made about the cost and safety of the manned missions, but the editor doesn't enumerate the risk and the cost factor. How risky are the manned missions, do they pose any life threats or there are some technological advancements that minimize the loss to only be pecuniary. If the this is true, then we should compare the amount of financial loss in the failures of manned and unmanned missions, and then only we can conclude.
The editor also mentions the successful missions series of the unmanned probes and satellites but forgot to compare it with the success rate of manned missions. What if the recent success of unmanned missions are related to some simple task. It is also possible that unmanned probes and satellites even though effective in simple missions can fail in convoluted tasks. Editor's argument could have been stronger if he had compared two similar missions done by manned and unmanned space flights.
The last claim that the editor has made doesn't satisfactorily strengthen his conclusion. 'Great deal of information' can't be quantified. Also the editor misses to mention how the unpredictable difficulties would be handled in the unmanned missions- situations like loss of communication or space storm, situations where immediate manual intervention is required.
All these open questions make the conclusion unconvincing. Answering these questions will make the editor's claim cogent.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
more arguments wanted. Here goes a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Characters: 1395 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.129 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.736 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.813 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.629 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... veritability of some of his claims. The first argument is made about the cos...
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Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... of the manned missions, but the editor doesnt enumerate the risk and the cost factor....
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Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...imize the loss to only be pecuniary. If the this is true, then we should compare the amo...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ions, and then only we can conclude. The editor also mentions the successful ...
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Line 5, column 45, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'missions'' or 'mission's'?
Suggestion: missions'; mission's
...The editor also mentions the successful missions series of the unmanned probes and satel...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... manned and unmanned space flights. The last claim that the editor has made ...
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Line 7, column 45, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...The last claim that the editor has made doesnt satisfactorily strengthen his conclusio...
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Line 7, column 120, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s conclusion. Great deal of information cant be quantified. Also the editor misses t...
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Line 7, column 140, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...deal of information cant be quantified. Also the editor misses to mention how the un...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...te manual intervention is required. All these open questions make the conclu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 55.5748502994 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 270.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79304692247 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548148148148 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.3310804073 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.46666666667 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237906679544 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775300763608 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687532939553 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106211718288 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691426546085 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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