Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
The prompt brought up two arguments that contradict each other. On one hand, it suggests that many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all apople in areas where the disease is detected. On the other hand, it segguests that since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered. In order to reach a conclusion about which argument is more solid than the other, there are several issues that needed to be addressed.
Firstly, we need data about how many people were sickened by cow flu, how bad their symptoms were and what is the percentage of the people who had cow flu died of the disease. These data will help us to have a better understanding of the impact of cow flu has. If the data shows a very small number of people actually were inpacted by cow flu, then there is no need for routinely administered inoculations.
Secondly, we also need to find out how lethal inoculations are. If inoculations are a effect way of control cow flu, and very few people will die from it, then routinely administered inoculations will benefit the majority of the population. Then routinely administered inoculations should be encouraged.
Thirdly, we need to find out if there is a way to determine who are likely to be victims of inoculations and who are likely to be victims of cow flu. If we can determine the demographic that is more prone to be sickened to be cow flu and that is likely to die from inoculations, then we can make a better designed inoculation program to protect the general public, by encouraging people who are likely to get cow flu but not likely to die from inoculations to have routine administered inoculations.
In summary, we need more evidences to back up each argument in order to make a well-informed determination. Before more information is exposed, any conclusion regarding the arguments mentioned in the prompt is premature.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 347 350
No. of Characters: 1630 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.316 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.697 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.954 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.321 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.655 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.243 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...l inoculations are. If inoculations are a effect way of control cow flu, and very...
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Line 7, column 350, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...gned inoculation program to protect the general public, by encouraging people who are likely t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in summary, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82708933718 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03360357083 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443804034582 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.7131630562 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.642857143 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.70786347227 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.500380952116 0.218282227539 229% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176242628205 0.0743258471296 237% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158090666972 0.0701772020484 225% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263431981171 0.128457276422 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.160256089689 0.0628817314937 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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