The effort of whomever it may be to develop and administer the inoculations against cow flu is definitely appreciable. There are multiple flaws in the arguments as listed in the following paragraphs.
First of all we need to know what do they mean by many lives saved. Were those saved lives were really suffering from cow flu and the administration of the vaccination really helped them to cure their symptoms or were they cleared on thier own? If we were to get the evidence to above statement then we can decide if its really the inoculations that helped people.
Secondly why would they need to administer inoculations to all the people in the area? Is the epidemic really spreads to other people in the area? If we can get evidence to this argument then it makes sense to vaccinate administration to all the people in areas. Otherwise if the medication has some sort of side effect then it can risk the lives of others.
Next we need to know what to they mean by small possibility.? Did people really die as a result of inoculations? or they died because the person was badly affected by the disease. We need a sure shot evidence for the death was really caused by the medication administration. We just cant attribute the death to the medication unless the above questions arent answered. This is because if the medication was really helpful and we wrongly blame for 1 or two deaths then it could in future risk the others lives from the benefits of the medication.
Finally if we can get an evidence for the deaths being attributed to the medications we need to know that was it caused by routine administration? May be the routine administration caused the drug overdose and created imbalance in the body and caused deaths. We need to conduct further tests on what really caused these deaths is it the medications first dose itself is harmful or repeated overuse is harmful. If we can get specific evidence to the above argument then we can administer drug in the smaller and may not be routine dosage in order to save lives instead of wasting time on new medication research aginst cow flu and moreover several deaths because of the disease. If the drugs first dose itself causes deaths then we need to find other optimal solutions for the cow flu.
So finally i would like conclude by saying that we need evidences for is the routine administration is really helpful : since its wastage of medicine and time if the benefits were to be seen by non routine administration. Do we really need to administer to all the people , if yes where is the evidence that it spreads? Can the deaths be directly blamed on the medications? What were the patients history of diseases? Did he die because of the medication or because he was in his final stages of the diesease? If the above questions were answered we can evaluate the decision to not to permit the inoculations against cow flu.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...lives were really suffering from cow flu and the administration of the vaccinatio...
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...ent then we can decide if its really the inoculations that helped people. Sec...
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...ly spreads to other people in the area? If we can get evidence to this argument th...
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... to this argument then it makes sense to vaccinate administration to all the peop...
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Suggestion: Otherwise,
...inistration to all the people in areas. Otherwise if the medication has some sort of side...
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...it can risk the lives of others. Next we need to know what to they mean by sma...
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...really die as a result of inoculations? or they died because the person was badly ...
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... the medication administration. We just cant attribute the death to the medication u...
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...e medication unless the above questions arent answered. This is because if the medica...
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Suggestion: Finally,
...rom the benefits of the medication. Finally if we can get an evidence for the death...
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...t caused by routine administration? May be the routine administration caused the d...
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...olutions for the cow flu. So finally i would like conclude by saying that we n...
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...lly need to administer to all the people , if yes where is the evidence that it sp...
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...lamed on the medications? What were the patients history of diseases? Did he die because...
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...as in his final stages of the diesease? If the above questions were answered we ca...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'sort of', 'as a result', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.2156133829 0.25644967241 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.182156133829 0.15541462614 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0631970260223 0.0836205057962 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0576208178439 0.0520304965353 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0706319702602 0.0272364105082 259% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.126394052045 0.125424944231 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0297397769517 0.0416121511921 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74848965871 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.046468401487 0.026700313972 174% => OK
Particles: 0.00185873605948 0.001811407834 103% => OK
Determiners: 0.109665427509 0.113004496875 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0241635687732 0.0255425247493 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0148698884758 0.0127820249294 116% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2906.0 2731.13054187 106% => OK
No of words: 512.0 446.07635468 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67578125 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.31640625 0.378187486979 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.22265625 0.287650121315 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.154296875 0.208842608468 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.091796875 0.135150697306 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74848965871 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40234375 0.469332199767 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.7928971504 52.1807786196 88% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.039408867 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6923076923 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5808478643 57.7814097925 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.769230769 141.986410481 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.538461538462 0.724660767414 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 3.58251231527 419% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 41.9579326923 51.9672348444 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.19760479042 1.8405768891 65% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438453641623 0.441005458295 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.129483999607 0.135418324435 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0916425256243 0.0829849096947 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.571735426614 0.58762219726 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136973727511 0.147661913831 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185361885361 0.193483328276 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558241078181 0.0970749176394 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.478777790913 0.42659136922 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.146530957494 0.0774707102158 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319241023942 0.312017818177 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354490593285 0.0698173142475 51% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.