In the above statement, the author asserts that all stores have to discontinue stocking many of their imported cheese and focus on domestic cheese for curtailing expenses by limiting inventory. While supporting the argument, however, the author relies on numerous assumptions which can not be taken for granted thus to evaluate this argument it is necessary for the author to give more information.
Firstly, the author assumes that the record of sold of last year will continue, however, this may not be true. There is no other evidence of demonstrating the selling of cheese for long-term period from all regions where they try to sell their cheeses. No one can assure that last year’s selling record will last to the future, it seems precarious to change their strategy of inventory. Moreover, the author relies on information from Wisconsin but customers of Wisconsin may not be representative of all populations of their customers all over regions.
Secondly, the author supposed that a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine is reliable, however, although the magazine did valid survey for their subscribers, nonetheless it may not directly relate to the author’s cheese business. Because the magazine conducted survey to only their subscribers who may be indulged into cheeses and have atypical preference than average customers, the result of the survey can not be parallel to interest of typical customers for their business. The assumptions that the subscribers’ taste is same as customers of their cheeses is needed to provide more evidence pertaining to respondents of the survey. Even if the survey is representative of all customers, it just showed a “recent” trend, so it may not be certain to last.
Lastly, the author presumes that inventory cost is the only factor contributing to profits, however, it may not be the case. There are several determining factors of profits such as original price of the product, cost of distribution and economical situation or else. If there imported cheeses are far lower than domestic cheese, dislocation of imported cheeses would reduce profit. Thus, the author have to consider other factors which influence cost and benefit.
In sum, the author asserts that they need to change their inventory system from current form to reducing imported cheeses storage, however, this argument relies on unjustified assumptions. To provide more convincing claim the author need to provide evidence related to representativeness of a recent report and a survey, and other contributing factors of benefits. Without this evidence, the author may not justify his or her argument.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2157 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.148 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.779 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.178 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 240, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...f the product, cost of distribution and economical situation or else. If there imported ch...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, thus, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3245823389 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91271940959 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477326968974 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7131281908 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.235294118 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6470588235 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237206763282 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854949468239 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854794393944 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141212412667 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596124856738 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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