The author confidently asserts that the new Captain Seafood restaurant specializing in seafood would be attractive people in Bay City, however, this argument relies on numerous assumptions that could not be taken for granted. Thus, the author needs to answer the questions related to the validity of the statement.
firstly, the author assumes that the cited recent sales study is representative of all restaurants in Bay City, but it may not be true. First of all, the author does not provide the number of respondents of that survey. If there were more than 50% of all restaurants that participated in the survey, it would have great representativeness of general restaurants. But, if there were just 10 restaurants that took in the survey, it would be loss persuasiveness of the survey. Moreover, the result is based on a period of five years so the circumstances of people’s taste may be changeable to some degree, if there are specific factors that influenced the survey’s result such as television’s program addressing the benefit’s of seafoods. Thus, the author has to answer about the representativeness of the survey.
Secondly, similar to the first reasons, the author presumes that the nationwide study is valid to represent the situation of Bay City. Yet, it is necessary for the author to provide more information about the diets of the majority of families in the city. Given a nationwide study is representative of the general population of the City, the author’s deduction is correct. However, if people in Bay City are different from the average people, so if they do not afford to pay the relatively expensive cost of seafood, the author’s prediction should be changed. Thus, questions about the characteristics of the population of Bay City and the adaptability of the nationwide study have to be addressed by the author for a more convincing argument.
Lastly, even those two studies have the representativeness of restaurants and people in Bay City, the success of the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specialized in seafood may not be warranted. In Bay City, there are no restaurants for only seafood but it does not mean that other restaurants do not sell kinds of seafood and a new seafood restaurant will attract a lot of people. When people choose where they want to eat, they do not just consider the kind of food. Multiple factors such as distance, cost, taste, or service could influence the success of the new restaurant. Thus, it is too hasty to conclude that the new seafood restaurant will succeed in Bay City.
In sum, the author predicts the success of a new seafood restaurant but is may not be guaranteed because of the above reasons. Thus, the author needs to answer questions pertaining to the representativeness of two surveys and other contributing factors for the success of the new restaurants to strengthen the author’s argument.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 478 350
No. of Characters: 2344 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.676 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.904 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.046 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.481 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.895 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Firstly
...ted to the validity of the statement. firstly, the author assumes that the cited rece...
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Line 3, column 746, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... author for a more convincing argument. Lastly, even those two studies have the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as to, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 478.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05857740586 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13311532703 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412133891213 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8017755383 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.9 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21821364509 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756000750038 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734379175457 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129364923514 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552792210137 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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