"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author is a owner of a cheese store present in the united states and says that since the brand new stores in Wisconsin has domestic cheddar cheeses as their top five best selling types of cheese , the company need to decrease the importing of the foreign cheese and need to more concentrate on the local or domestic cheese to get more profits as the transport charge decreases a lot.
The author's decision is like a selfish one and would be used only for his company , he missed addressing some of the information that needs to be considered while taking the decision.
Firstly, the author says that the top five best selling types of cheese at the brand new store in Wisconsin were local or domestic cheddar cheeses.Here there is an ambiguity, the author says top five are from domestic cheddar cheeses in Wisconsin, if they are top five in one of the place they will definitely be the best selling cheeses in other places of united states also.this is the main ambiguity in the conclusion and also can be called as a baseless conclusion and author should look into other information before giving a proper conclusion.In the present world most of the people prefer for branded items and these are mostly imported products.if this is true then all the imported cheese will get a great loss if it is done as per the author's suggession.So, as per a good business man one should not bring a loss to other person knowingly,but should make profit without harming others.this should be considered while making conclusions.
Secondly, the author says that in a recent survey that is conducted by cheeses of world magazine there is an increase in preference of domestic cheese over imported cheese among its subscribers.this is a positive thing t the domestic or local producers of cheese.but the author needs to keep in mind the fact that most of the customers of cheese may or may not be the subscribers of cheeses of world magazine .if there are more percentage of customers in subscribers it is well and good but if it is not there may be a huge loss to the author.He also says to decrease the stocking up of imported varieties of cheese and suggests to concentrate more on domestic cheeses.but even this may cause difficulty because changing the whole customers choice of cheese at a time is a highly risky job.Instead can change slowly their choice of choice like first giving some offers and then giving a hike in the prices.also the author should keep in mind the subscribers of cheese of world magazine are all over the world but author only supplies to wisconsin.So each and every detail of the survey should be taken into consideration for a better growth.
Finally, there should be a proper parameters for considering on how to change the choice of customers to the domestic cheese over th imported cheese.And there should be perfect plan and implementation of it to get a success.And the author needs to consider more parameters other than only the survey results to get a perfect result in his/her business.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 15 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 534 350
No. of Characters: 2466 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.807 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.618 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 66.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.695 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.487 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.184 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
The author is a owner of a cheese store present in the ...
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Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ir top five best selling types of cheese , the company need to decrease the import...
^^
Line 2, column 82, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e and would be used only for his company , he missed addressing some of the inform...
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Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... for his company , he missed addressing some of the information that needs to be considered...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Here
... were local or domestic cheddar cheeses.Here there is an ambiguity, the author says ...
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Line 3, column 371, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...heeses in other places of united states also.this is the main ambiguity in the concl...
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Line 3, column 549, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ation before giving a proper conclusion.In the present world most of the people pr...
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Line 3, column 764, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...t is done as per the authors suggession.So, as per a good business man one should ...
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Line 3, column 848, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...t bring a loss to other person knowingly,but should make profit without harming othe...
^^^^
Line 4, column 383, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ese may or may not be the subscribers of cheeses of world magazine .if there are ...
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Line 4, column 410, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ubscribers of cheeses of world magazine .if there are more percentage of customer...
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Line 4, column 544, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
... there may be a huge loss to the author.He also says to decrease the stocking up o...
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Line 4, column 587, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...also says to decrease the stocking up of imported varieties of cheese and suggest...
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Line 4, column 792, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Instead
... cheese at a time is a highly risky job.Instead can change slowly their choice of choic...
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Line 4, column 792, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
... cheese at a time is a highly risky job.Instead can change slowly their choice of choic...
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Line 4, column 1049, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...d but author only supplies to wisconsin.So each and every detail of the survey sho...
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Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'parameter'?
Suggestion: parameter
...wth. Finally, there should be a proper parameters for considering on how to change the ch...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...domestic cheese over th imported cheese.And there should be perfect plan and implem...
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Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...d implementation of it to get a success.And the author needs to consider more param...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2496.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 524.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76335877863 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73676052541 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404580152672 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 104.0 22.8473053892 455% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 372.908246087 57.8364921388 645% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 499.2 119.503703932 418% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 104.8 23.324526521 449% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.0 5.70786347227 315% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283153532336 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165524497986 0.0743258471296 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109049114722 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165524497986 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109049114722 0.0628817314937 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 53.4 14.3799401198 371% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -25.62 48.3550499002 -53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 42.7 12.197005988 350% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.51 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.42 8.32208582834 137% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 12.3882235529 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 43.6 11.1389221557 391% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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