In Megalopolis, the number of law school graduates who went to work for large, corporate firms declined by 15 percent over the last three years, whereas an increasing number of graduates took jobs at small, general practice firms. Even though large firms usually offer much higher salaries, law school graduates are choosing to work for the smaller firms most likely because they experience greater job satisfaction at smaller firms. In a survey of first-year students at a leading law school, most agreed with the statement that earning a high salary was less important to them than job satisfaction. This finding suggests that the large, corporate firms of Megalopolis will need to offer graduates more benefits and incentives and reduce the number of hours they must work.
As per the data suggested in the argument, graduate students are preferring small law firms to work for instead of larger firms, who offer higher salaries. By this data, newspaper is coming to conclusion that larger corporate firms need to offer more incentive and reduce the number of working hours for the employees. The drawn conclusion has various flows in it. The data suggested in the arguments is not driving the given conclusion.
First of all, the data present in the argument is in percentage forms. We cannot compare the data without actual numbers. The argument is merely suggesting that there is a decline of 15% of graduate students going to large corporate firms. The actual number of graduate students, who are going to larger law firms, may be still higher than students who are going to small firms.
Secondly, from the data we can't get the actual the data of salaries of small and large firms. It is just mentioned that larger firms offer higher salaries. But it does not provide the data about the salaries offered at small firms. The difference between the salary may not be that high. So, we cannot conclude based on this parameters that graduate students are choosing small firms over larger corporate firms.
Thirdly, the job satisfaction may not be the only parameter which is driving graduate students to smaller law firms. There can be various parameters which graduate students are considering before choosing their career. Like the larger firms may not be providing the better opportunities to their employees as smaller firms are providing. The smaller firms may be closer to their houses and larger firms are at outskirt in the city. So, these data can also driver students to choose their dream firm.
Last but not least, there is no comparison of work hours between large corporate firms and small firms. Without comparing the work hour’s data we cannot conclude that graduate students are more inclined towards small firms over large firms. Also the survey taken to conclude the argument is not valid. This survey only include the students from first year at law school. Now, these students may not have good exposure to the industry at this early stage. So this survey’s data does not consider to be generalized for all students.
To sum up, there are no solid data which is giving full proof to the conclusion. There are various parameters mentioned earlier which newspaper has failed to consider like location or opportunities provided at various firms. Also, there are possibilities which are not consider in this argument like larger firms might have start recruiting only from the selected law school and they stop appearing on the career job fair. In this way the conclusion drawn hold no waters. To come to the full proof and valid conclusion, newspaper should consider more parameters and it should provide more rigid data compare to the current data.
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Essay evaluation report
also need to argue:
This finding suggests that the large, corporate firms of Megalopolis will need to offer graduates more benefits and incentives and reduce the number of hours they must work.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2361 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.858 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.395 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.759 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.213 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.586 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...sted in the argument, graduate students are preferring small law firms to work for instead of ...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...l firms. Secondly, from the data we cant get the actual the data of salaries of ...
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Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...t high. So, we cannot conclude based on this parameters that graduate students are c...
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Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...d towards small firms over large firms. Also the survey taken to conclude the argume...
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Line 11, column 270, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
..., there are possibilities which are not consider in this argument like larger firms migh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01234567901 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47434293187 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.395061728395 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3034174174 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7586206897 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27586206897 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264197959555 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799354152486 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771112358527 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162402588117 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537448385084 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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