This argument concludes that consistent dairy product consumption increase the risk of osteoporosis unlike it has been generally thought. The conclusion rests on the study that found that people who consumed milk and other dairy product frequently had a higher rate of bone fractures than other participants in the study. Close scrutiny of this argument reveals that it lends little credible for the author’s assertion.
First of all, it is stated that osteoporosis is linked to the environmental factor. In other words, there must be certain conditions that cause the emergence of the disease. Therefore, more information about the study participants’ location is required to evaluate the argument. It could be bolstered if all the participants turned out to be from the same area so that they had an equal possibility of developing osteoporosis. However, unless such evidence is provided, it is entirely possible that people who took part in the study were from different corners of the country, let alone, world. This means, that they were exposed to different environmental conditions that could influence the results of the study.
Secondly, the genetic factor should be considered as well since it can be the cause of the disease. In order to examine the argument fully, the results of genetic tests are required. It could be the case, that some participants had a genetic predisposition for this disease, therefore, they would significantly skew the results of the whole study. Unless all people participating in the research were clear of the genetic predisposition, no conclusion can be drawn from it.
Thirdly, we have to be sure that all people had similar eating habits except for the diary product consumptions as well as none of them were taking additional vitamins in the form of pills or other supplements. For that matter, perhaps some participants were more concerned about their health, so they would add certain supplements to their ration. If this proves to be true, then the findings of the study would be significantly undermined.
In conclusion, there are at least three specific pieces of evidence are needed in order to evaluate the soundness of the made conclusion: we must be sure that (1) all study participants lived in the same or very similar environmental conditions; (2) none of them had a genetic predisposition for the disease; (3) nobody was taking additional vitamins or other supplements.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 1985 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.051 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.918 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.494 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...s than other participants in the study. Close scrutiny of this argument reveals that it lends ...
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Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... In order to examine the argument fully, the results of genetic tests are require...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, at least, except for, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21882951654 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0764358474 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491094147583 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5501865936 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.647058824 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 5.70786347227 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107210295372 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370673838835 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368153663598 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0673404764201 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401232322734 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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