The author posits that consuming dairy products on a regular basis has advert effects and increase the risk of osteoporosis. To bolster his claims he has put for ward some of the evidences. One of them is a long term study of al large number of people who consistently consumed dairy products throughout the years of study have a higher rate of bone fractures than any other participants. Furthermore, it is linked with the genetic factors that causes the bones to weaken significantly with age. The argument can be considered viable only if the author gives answers to the below three questions and has to go through scrupulous discussions.
Firstly, the brand or the source of dairy products is never mentioned. There might be chances that these arrive from a faulty resource and are not of good quality. These days many local businessman are injecting artificial harmones into the animals to make them yield a prominent amount of dairy products. The products consumed in along run are showing adverse effects such as PCOD which is dominance of male characters in a female. The main purpose of consuming dairy products is to build strength and to get a good source vitamin D which in in turn effected. If this is considered a crucial fact the argument would be attenuated.
In addition, the age at which the people administered into the case study is not discussed. what if all people when they start this research is above 60 years ? It is an average old age of any individual even if he intakes dairy products on a regular basis to mitigate the effects of osteoporosis would not help any further the damage would have been already done. They should prescribe this diet from an early stage instead of inducing at the conclusion.
Lastly, the health condition of the people is not taken into account. There might be chances of lacking of other harmones in an enumerate number of people and could also face with accidents at an early stage. This could frustrate the development of bones even though a efficient amount of vitamins are provided. There might be conditions in which the people consuming an eminent diet might have diabetes which will in turn discharge all the required nutrition. The people which a good track of physical condition should be considered before starting these beneficial research. If this taken into account would undermine the argument.
To conclude, the argument is flawed with several unwarranted assumptions and can be considered tenable only if the author provides further evidence and answers to the above questions. At this point the argument is considered dubious and all most falls flat with all the misleading questions.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2179 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.864 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.608 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.296 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.279 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.279 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... bolster his claims he has put for ward some of the evidences. One of them is a long term s...
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Line 2, column 540, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...nd to get a good source vitamin D which in in turn effected. If this is considered a ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 561, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ce vitamin D which in in turn effected. If this is considered a crucial fact the a...
^^
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...d into the case study is not discussed. what if all people when they start this rese...
^^^^
Line 4, column 125, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...chances of lacking of other harmones in an enumerate number of people and could also face wi...
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Line 4, column 267, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...te the development of bones even though a efficient amount of vitamins are provid...
^
Line 4, column 577, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ore starting these beneficial research. If this taken into account would undermine...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, so, as to, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 448.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94419642857 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69734834914 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502232142857 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3320273388 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3043478261 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4782608696 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.39130434783 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174076910589 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492040560969 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463585097264 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956927431829 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545483154839 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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