Technology has developed rapidly these days. Every day a new update or a game is getting released into the market. Children are getting attracted more and more to the online games now a days and forgetting the world around. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement that playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them using three reasons. To elaborate one has to go through scrupulous discussion below.
Firstly, children are neglecting the daily activities they have to perform when they get their hands on video games. For instance, when a child is allowed to play computer games during breakfast time they are getting hypnotized by the virtual world leaving behind the crucial daily task of eating breakfast. Not only that if they are left uninterrupted then this would go on until they get tired or even the whole day. This shows a very bad impact as they are missing important activities to be done in a day to day life.
In addition, physical exercise is a pivotal task for one's growth and immunity boost up. For children they acquire this through playing outdoor games such as running, hide and seek which also involves creative thinking to hide at different places. With the introduction of online games children are missing this crucial part in their childhood and playing outdoor also builds an emotional connect with their friends by involving in group tasks which they would miss if they are sitting at home and playing alone and also getting unhealthy such as obesity is getting common these days even in small children.
Furthermore, education is abandoned for its sake. Recently there are several articles that are published stating that children are wasting a lot of money without the knowledge of their parents to get some extra access while playing online. With more concentration on this unwanted path the cardinal field that is study is not given the required attention. They are getting low grades than expected of their caliber due to lack of concentration. Even though if they get some time to relax they are not interacting with nature instead opening their phones and starting a new game session.
To conclude, many will argue that this will help children to stay updated with the latest technology and help them to find their interest in this particular field. But it would not be the interest for a major set of people for most it is a mere entertainment task. Instead for a better tomorrow they could focus this time on building good hobbies which will give them peace during times of stress and they could also channel this energy for learning something new by building projects or doing a course online.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...acted more and more to the online games now a days and forgetting the world around. In my ...
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Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...physical exercise is a pivotal task for ones growth and immunity boost up. For child...
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Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
... updated with the latest technology and help them to find their interest in this particular field...
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Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...r most it is a mere entertainment task. Instead for a better tomorrow they could focus ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, then, while, as to, for instance, in addition, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84782608696 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45957486298 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523913043478 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.3235093175 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28880234943 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861060553582 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142510476535 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181408619758 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120564573224 0.0645574589148 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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