Government serves people based on their needs and requirements. They always make sure to give the best they could in terms of work or service they provide. In my opinion , I moderately disagree with the suggestion and argue that officials should look in a broad perspective and also foment the public opinion for two reasons.
To begin there is corruption still extant in many parts of the world. For instance if a large project has to be constructed and if the entire decision is held in the official's hand there are chances of squandering money without letting know the people what is actually done with the hard earned money they paid taxes for. This would never get into the records and finally cause the decimation of a large number of people one day. It seems absurd to keep the responsibility wholly at one place.
Secondly, Illiteracy is a serious problem prominent everywhere. For instance if public demands for a water tank next to a large river or lake its their immaturity to not think of better handling of the public funds rather than wasting on a resource which are evident. This involves a lot of man power and resources wasting both time and money instead when they can easily fetch with a motor or large drums. It seems glaringly obvious that officials are the one who should take the final decision.
Of course, some argue that Official's judgement should be final. Is it not the way it happens every time ? But it's good if both the parties are involved in making a collective decision which produces the most fruitful result for a better society and to make our lives more easier. Every opinion should be valued and distinguished based on the benefits and then come to a final decision which is approved by the Government officials
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, as to, for instance, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 2235.4752809 65% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75163398693 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51716991383 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0962191453 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9333333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188229960619 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601407694795 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625579788954 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114423877314 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535200800988 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.