Author states that all the students in a nation should follow the same curriculum. It is necessary for every individual to have a grip of all the subjects and a clarity in which they are interested in. Having said that until schooling they are exposed to almost all kind of paths they might supposed to choose. In my opinion I partially agree with the fact that students look inward rather than outward for two reasons.
All the students are subjected to similar curriculum which concludes that everyone are instructed to follow the same path until college. For instance if an individual is interested in computer science subject and what if that is not included in the present general courses which whole nation follows if would cause immense loss and wastage of time in his career and also the student completes the college with apathy. He only gets signed up for college just as an entry to follow his passion instead leaving the pragmatic knowledge he could gain. so to conclude its would be worth it if they find follow their interests.
Furthermore it's always common for tyro to confound and regret after choosing a career path. Then they would make a move shifting to an alternative career which apposite their interests. For instance if a jejune is influenced by the private colleges to join them by showing lucrative offers at end of the course. They might take a wrong step and follow currency instead of their interests. So to mitigate the chances it would be a good recommendation to follow a curriculum and find the enamored subjects they would like to pursue. There are amply chances out there to get into a field once you make a decision to evolve.
Of course there are both edge cases and drawbacks in both the ways. shouldn't the passion should always take the charge ? Its a profit if one elucidate their interests and take a step towards their career. There are more chances of finding a correct way when they are more progressed in minds. In my opinion there is gain if they follow the similar curriculum until college.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 338, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...ed to choose. In my opinion I partially agree with the fact that students look inward rather than outwar...
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Line 2, column 548, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...the pragmatic knowledge he could gain. so to conclude its would be worth it if th...
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Line 2, column 563, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...nowledge he could gain. so to conclude its would be worth it if they find follow t...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...t if they find follow their interests. Furthermore its always common for tyro to confound ...
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Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[2]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...posite their interests. For instance if a jejune is influenced by the private colleges t...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Shouldnt
...e cases and drawbacks in both the ways. shouldnt the passion should always take the char...
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Line 4, column 68, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...e cases and drawbacks in both the ways. shouldnt the passion should always take the char...
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Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...assion should always take the charge ? Its a profit if one elucidate their interes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, so, then, for instance, kind of, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 356.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73314606742 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47481805383 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522471910112 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3778353218 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6842105263 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247926762062 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755166554192 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600349111845 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154874402367 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641167415222 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.