While it may seems plausible that the moilac is quite efficient to ease the symptoms of digestive discomfort, this statement made too may assumptions and failed to give a reasonable link between eating motilac and the reducing of digestive discomfort.
In the statement, the author point out that the increase of the molitac suppliments could account for the decrease happen in the Greenhome's five hospitals last year. However, a one-year's record is not evident enough to illustrates the effect brought by the seven year's increase of molitac supply. It is possible that during the last 7 years, there were both up and down in the number of patients who suffer from the digestive discomfort. This year's decrease may be just one section in a long-time fluctuation. Moreover, the total increase duiring the 7 years have no relations with this years trend, which may drop in a small scale that would not contribute a lot to the total tendency. This will definitly counter wth the conclusion in the statement if it had been true. It would be better if the author give a more detailed record of the tendency of both the number of patients and supply of the motilac.
At the same time, the fact of the number of patients in Etolin increase may not link with the decend of the motilac intake by its residents. We have no idea how long since the number of motilac started to drop down. If they just began to slide from the last year, it would be hard to connect it with a longer-time drop in the past two years.
Most importantly, it hard for us to believe that the intake of motalic has connection with the cure of a specific discomfort without pointing any scientific reasons. Mutiple causes could contribute to the digestive discomfort and also the ease of it. The number of the patients decrease in the Greenhome's hospital may just because the new policies about the environmental protection are implimented in this city so that the some of the causes of this discomfort are eliminated.
In conclusion, although it may be true that the motilac do have effect on curing some discomforts, the author does not give enough evidence and explicit reports and records to support his/her assumtions. This may, ended with the fewer people trust the analysis and conclusions he/she came up with.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1854 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.682 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.582 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.227 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.337 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 424, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...re implimented in this city so that the some of the causes of this discomfort are el...
^^^^
Line 4, column 424, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...re implimented in this city so that the some of the causes of this discomfort are eliminate...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79949238579 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65618201441 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502538071066 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5377468469 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.1875 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9375 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0827276116111 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0308954396515 0.0743258471296 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299906550709 0.0701772020484 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0566219802007 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022720685447 0.0628817314937 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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